Just a little bit of C&C as I catch up on my email. (Some of its late as
I'm good at procrastinating).
Subject: [FFML] [FFMl][Fanfic][TM]Princess and the Pirate <Chapter 2>
Date: Thu, 23 Mar 2000 06:48:10 EST
From: Kyhdin@aol.com
To: ffml@fanfic.com
Comments: My primary complaint is the length; I want more! Interesting
premise and carried out with a minimium of fuss. Formatting and grammar
are acceptable, and the characters are reacting well. I think you might
be underestimating Ryoko's cunning a little bit; she was a successful
pirate for hundreds of years but she seems a little naive in the scene
with the phone call. Recommended.
[FFML] [Fanfic][Tenchi]Sketches of Tenchi 4: Tentative Explorations
Date: Thu, 23 Mar 2000 19:20:51 -0500
From: "Miller, Bert" <bert.miller@unisys.com>
To: "'ffml@fanfic.com'" <ffml@fanfic.com>
Comments: Good read, good flow and good characters. A nice look at
how the multiple wives scenario would work. Also contains more sexual
innuendo than Garden of Eva (well, almost).
<"I don't want to know. I don't want to know.">
A great way to end the part, by the way.
[FFML] [EVA/Lovecraft] Children of an Elder God #15
Date: Fri, 24 Mar 2000 21:06:21 -0800 (PST)
From: Rhea Seraph <rhea@ikkoku.maison-otaku.net>
To: ffml@fanfic.com
Commentary: As always the mechanics of this work are close to perfect.
The plot is impressive, cramming a lot of subtext into this part and I
love the way the characters are interacting. The writing style is
suitably dramatic and though some portions of the narrative lose a bit
of coherence the overall story is excellent. Easily my favorite series
still running. Highly Recommended.
Jerico