@@IMO while this is a very interesting story concept,
this needs
to be better devloped within this story. As an
_original_ story this
would be much easier. Dealing with established
characters
causes problems specific to writing fanfic. Again,
IMO,
while it is certainly possible to postulate Ranma as a
girl, originally,
and Ranma and Akane as childhood friends there needs
to
be more detail to make this believable.
Amen concerning the whole post, Allyn. You put everything I
was trying to say in a much less verbose and acidic manner. I would
like to point out something which I am unclear on in the story, that
I caught while reading your C&C.
I am unsure if this is accurate, but concerning the films
that were being shown at Nodoka's house, I was imagining them as 8MM
films or whatnot, shown on a projector... However, it mentions a
TV, so it might be helpful to clarify which is going on. Of course,
if it was originally video tapes, then I guess I have no leg to
stand on.
In any case, more development equates to more believability
in deviating fictions from a standardized source.
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