Thank you for your comments!
on 3/20/2000 8:07 AM, Mass Dahn <mass_dahn@hotmail.com> wrote:
question.. how did Shampoo get inroled in school.. I mena she has no prior
refferences. so she .. argh.. you know she should acctually have to take a
test or something to show how much she knew before she could atend classes.
If Ranma could get into this school with his grades, I'm sure Shampoo would
have no problem. :-)
It was a good thing Ranko was holding the unconscious Akane, as
she served as support when Ranko fainted, too.
Ranma fainting? okay now I reall yam conviced that she is changed.
but in fact the fainting is just a myth. it is due to the lack of Oxygen to
the brain . for example if you dont eat propelly if you bathe in th esun
with out having eaten. if you wear VERY tight dresses. fainting merly by
shock? oh my..
I know, I've never come close to fainting in my life, except one time when I
was really sick. I've never seen anyone else faint, either. It's so
dramatic, though. Any other ideas for conveying substantial shock? I could
certainly see both of them being unresponsive for several minutes, even if
they didn't faint. I thought this was a little funnier, too. It's partly
comic.
okay there that wa sthe part you should Rewrite.. see its just staing what
has happened in the other chapters. I dont mind but its to much staing using
almost the samewords all the time .. instead of telling everything you
should only tell some and andd more parts that havnt been told like some
important trivia on days we havnt seen.. oh and damn she giggles much.
seemed to me you used the Giggless cause you also saw that this part was bad
and needed something anchored to the present.
I can see your point. Actually, most of the text here is Ranko's feelings
about what happened, rather than a straight retelling. It's *her* take on
what's happened this summer. I felt that if she just talked about how she
felt about it, Genma would have no way of putting her feelings in context. I
will think about ways to cut down the repetition.
Giggles are just another way of laughing... I will try to make sure there is
not too much giggling going on. :-)
okay Genma realises this far to easy and in much to plausable way.. I think
it should take more time.
I guess I don't understand this. Genma is well aware that Ranma was a girl,
and remembers Ranko's first four and a half years very well. He is her
father. He, more than anyone, would start to recognize Ranko in Ranma (or
vice versa).
oh and now that he has his daughetr back I would see him take on a more
Father to daughter role. like protecting( or trying) her from boys saying
things like. boys only want one thing.. think that would fit Genma
perfectly.
That will happen over time. He's still a little in shock in part 3.
Poor Genma. it isnt so much that Ranko doesnt like to be a warrior but that
all her fathers teachings all that he have thought her is at naught its like
there is no Genma in Ranko anymore.
Don't jump to conclusions until you see Part 4. :-)
Deborah