Subject: [FFML] Re: [FFML][Fanfic][Ranma] One Day
From: Jason Liao
Date: 3/18/2000, 12:44 PM
To: RICHARDROBINSONJR@prodigy.net
CC: ffml@fanfic.com

Pretty nice.

While I may be biased, having written something in a similar vein last
year (Akane Can Cook), I think that showing Akane cooking would have been
more effective.  Also, I thought it was a little wordy, for something such
a simple plotline.

However, I did like your comparison of Akane's problem to
Ryouga's problem.  It helped illustrate the point well.

-Natsume Ranma Ranma
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The sardines weren't worth the trouble.  A few more shots, then
Ryoga-san would overheat and explode.  Ducking around a corner,
I managed to lose him as I entered the ramshackle residence of
my Anime supplier.

One look at his face and I knew that I had been betrayed.  "Tell me,"
I insisted.  He refused, so I slammed him against the wall.
"Last chance.  Where can Ranma-Ranma find good fanfics?"
"Try Jason Liao," he whispered, before he slumped to the floor.
I heard the sounds of a door splintering as I left through the
window, one step ahead of Tendo Heavy Industries...




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