on 3/17/2000 7:07 AM, Miller, Bert <bert.miller@unisys.com> wrote:
Well... you misunderstood "throw out", or I wasn't clear. I
meant to _add_ an allusion, in passing, to some recent incident
familiar to readers. For instance, "last week's incident with
the water-resistent soap". This will effectively timestamp the
story as occurring significantly before Volume 22. Dating the
story earlier not only permits Ranma and Akane to show suspicion
of Cologne, but also allows helps you with those readers who
have trouble swallowing Akane's switch from 'boyfriend' to 'friend'.
Oops, you're right. I did misunderstand it.
I will have to look at what I can put in to date it earlier.
My recommendation: keep the back room, keep Ukyou leaving.
Just change it from 'kitchen' to 'the back'.
This sounds like a good idea. Of course, since there's a sink in front, why
does she need to go in back, but that's a more subtle problem fewer people
will notice. :-)
Thank you for the C&C!
Deborah