Hi, hi, VGAP!
I was going to comment further on the MST you did,
but real life and a rush to
complete the overdue chapter of my series interfered
in a major way.
Hopefully, this C&C will make it up a little.
Don't worry, I can't blame you. I still haven't
read the latest of your Awakening of Demons, even
though I have got it saved on my account.
As always, all C&C are my opinions and suggestions
only.
Thanks for the corrections, but I don't think I
will bother to revise this.
Nabiki Tendo never liked dying. Especially
when it involved losing
all of your weapons save for a wimpy pistol, all
your power-ups, and a
forced return to the beginning of the stage.
Very nice wording here. :)
Good for something I came up while half-sleep,
yes?
<When I see that blasted Nanban Mirror
again, I'm going to make
sure it's reduced to atomic particles. No,
smaller.)
Ukyo develops the first nuclear-fission
battle-spatula? :)
Parappa sure is encouraging her to do so... ^_^
nothing was wrong, really. "Nothing, Shiori. Let's
just head home."
<Great. Just great. When am I going to make it back
home?>
Thousand Arms would also have been a cute choice. :)
Or Sakura Taisen... But then, Ranma would have
gotten to be a hero, and he wouldn't mind it so much.
In Tokimeki Memorial, there's almost no battles at
all.
A cute fic, even if I was lost most of the time. Keep
writing!
Thanks for your comments!
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