One day I will reply to a fic the same day it's posted. It will happen I
tell you.
I guess the best place to start would be right at end of the journey.
Bonus points for an unusual opening.
I liked the flow of prose leading up to the arrival at the amazon
village. While it took me a bit to figure out it was Akane narrating, I
was dead set on it being Ranma's kid for some reason, the refferences
people and the perceptions did seem to be reasonable.
As it has most likely already been stated, it is rather melodramatic. I
like melodrama though so it wasn't really a problem for me. Akane was
very nicely in character. One is forced to wonder how she thinks three
months of training with Genma would let her defeat Shampoo when Ranma,
who was training with Genma for his entire life couldn't defeat her. Oh
well, there's Akane for you.
The fight scene was nice, but a bit to much into the emotional aspect
for me. I like the action clean and quick. Still, it was what was called
for.
This, and the last serious one shot you released that I remember are
both first person Ranma fics. I'm forced to wonder why you don't haul
out and write a full size sucker in this style.