Alex Gray wrote:
An interesting little read (I like "weird"stories ^_- )
There are a number of basic spelling mistakes and grammer errors
which would help improve the read if corrected
Could you please list them all? (BTW, you wrote "grammEr" errorz; my
dictionnaires all spell "grammAr" --- nevermind). I'm afraid there
are several *semantic* errors too.
and sometimes it
is a bit difficult to follow the line/flow of the story,
I know it. I did intend the story to be almost entirely made up of
dialogues, which then had to be "tailored" together by some "external"
descriptions(as few as possible).
but other than that
a nice idea.
Also, I might suggest that you break up the sentences as this would help
to improve the flow.
If I had never read "À la recherche du temps perdu"(Marcel Proust), probably
I would accept this suggestion.
Cheers
Alex
Ja ne! ^_^
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