Mike Allen wrote:
A slow, dangerous smile crept across her face. She now knew what
to do.
Ranko: Saotome Secret Final Attack: Run Away.
With a flick of her right hand, Ranko pushed her now unbound hair
over her shoulder. Cold fire blazed from her eyes as she retorted,
"I've got two things to say to you, Creep! One is, this girl is gonna
kick your sorry butt into the dirt. The second is that ANY man is
more worthy than you to..." she grimaced slightly at the thought,
"...be the father of my children. In fact, all of the women here are
Mousse pops out of nowhere. "You mean I have a chance at Saotome too?"
To her surprise, Myrrh dropped his defense and let her punches
hit. He merely smiled as he watched her face slacken with surprise
when she heard the ringing of his chain mail rattle against the light
metal plate hidden underneath it
What's good for the bull, is good for the Amazon. (I think Myrrah was of
bull blood anyway.)
Seeing that she could not escape that way, she reversed and
rolled under him, grabbing Myrrh's leg and swinging upward with a knee
to catch him in the groin.
He laughed. "The joke's on you. I had my gonads removed."
Ranko looked at him in disgust. "You had your gonads removed and you think
the joke's on me?"
(Actually that's a line from a comic called 'Badger' but I couldn't resist
it. ^_^)
He cried out in agony and pitched forward
onto the ground.
Ranko kicked herself away from him and quickly stood up, facing
towards the Musk noble in a ready position. "Compliments of the
Saotome Scholl
School
of Anything Goes," she quipped. "Thought you oughta
know better than to expose yourself." Not giving anything away, she
circled him, surreptitiously testing her back, giving him time to
recover.
Myrrh slowly stood while holding his groin. Ignoring the jeers
>from the watching Amazons, he proceeded to unsnap a few clasps and
removed a metal cup, heavily dented. Flinging the useless thing away,
he stood straight and glared at Ranko.
"You insolent wench! How dare you humiliate me in front of my
men!
But that's what getting married's all about. You have someone to officially
humiliate you in front of your friends.
For that, I'm going to make you beg, before I even think about
stopping." He rushed her, attempting to grapple, but it was obvious
to all of the warriors present that his injury was still bothering
him.
Ranko continued to circle, eluding him. Her assault had only
partially worked. He was hurt, but protected as he by
he was by
his armor they
had come out pretty even. The problem was that he had already scored
twice on her.
Since you use 'score' later in the sentence, I'd recommend 'struck her
twice.' or something similar.
Beside, you're supposed to 'score' with chicks. It's a good thing. ^_^
It was time for the big guns.
She's going to flash him her tits?
Moving away from him, she stopped when she was thirty feet away
and turned around with a cry of, "Mouko Takabisha!"
Oh. Those kind of guns.
>From her
outstretched hands, a bright beam of energy lanced out towards Myrrh.
The Musk tracked its progress with amused surprise. Just before
it hit, he yelled, "Bull Walking Through Reeds!"
"Do you honestly believe I'd fall for that trick?" Ranko shouted three
seconds before the bull that had been walking through the reeds lowered its
head and gored her.
He ran towards her, into her beam, his body emitting a feeble,
brownish glow.
Ewww. Some Pepto would take care of that little problem.
To Ranko's surprise, her blast acted like a stream of
water hitting a large stone.
In a few decades it wore Myrrh down to nothing?
It separated into two and flowed around
him, coming back together and continuing onwards behind him. Atching
Catching
her with a shoulder tackle, he drove her into one of the wooden poles
before she could react. He bore in with his entire weight trying
weight, trying
to
crack at least one of her ribs.
Not having the upper body strength to throw him off, she chopped
at the pillar behind her, breaking it off.
'in half' would sound better than 'off', since you just used off earlier in
the sentence.
Ranko's curse was muffled as she rolled to her feet. Both sides
of her ribcage ached and her back was hurting even more.
Well, she is a bit top heavy. She can expect that problem to come back
later in life.
She felt a little better, for he clutched his own side as he
stood. "You're still ahead, you jerk. But not for long," she
promised. As things stood, she had three injuries to his two. His
had hit the groung
ground
hard when she kicked him. She shook her head to
clear it and refocus on her fight.
He was simply too
drop 'simply' Unneccesary.
strong to face directly. So, she decided to
change tactics again. If a chi-blast was ineffective, maybe she
should try a tornado?
No no. Try a gun. With armor piercing bullets. That should do the job.
Ranko's gasping slowed, as she calmed herself
and began her spiraling attack.
Since Herb knew a counter to it, I doubt of Ranma would risk trying it on
Myrrh. Too likely he might know the counter too.
With a smirk, he waited for her to stand. "Those Amazon tricks
won't work against me, my little Cherry
cherry
Cologne stood, smiling. "Arise, grand-daughter. We are well
pleased!" Turning to the cheering Amazons, she held her arms up
signaling quiet. "This is my grand-daughter
Given her age relative to Shampoo, shouldn't it be great grand-daughter?
by adoption, Ranko
Saotome. Her mother accepted my invitation to join us as an Amazon
two weeks ago. Please welcome the two of them as you greet them. My
new daughter, Nodoka, also has four sons. They are here before you."
She gestured at Ranma, Luan Ma, Ranchan, and
Zeppo.
"You will be mine. This I swear." He
swear," he
The four brothers shared a look and Luan Ma coughed into his
hand. He put his hand behind his head and said, "It's like this. We
kinda thought that he might want to jump in and mess up your fight.
So," the four men turned and showed her a struggling Tatewaki. "We
tied him up and gagged him when he got here."
Nice planning.
Later that afternoon, Ryoga sat in the room she had shared with
Ukyo and Ranko for the last two weeks. Ukyo had left to talk with
Cologne about her wedding ceremony. She was very nervous and wanted
everything to go right.
Ukyou made certain that Ranchan understood she would be the one to wear the
tux.
Ranko, as the only warrior in her family, was
to formally deliver the males into the hands of their new wives. She
had been pulled away to be taught her role.
Which basically consisted of smacking her brothers around if they got cold
feet and tried to make a break for it.
"Come in." She
in," she
called as she moved to sit on her bedroll.
The door opened and a very skittish looking
skittish-looking
bride's maid. Kasumi will be acting as the head of the family and
can't be by my side. Nabiki said she'd like to, but she is acting as
Ukyo's family representative. Ranko is her family guard and is
supposed to make sure that her brothers don't run.
Well I'll be. I was right.
these men to their new families. If accepted, my brothers shall be
called: Shan Luan Ma, husband of Shan Pu; Kuonji Ranchan, husband of
Kuonji Ukyo; and Tendo Ranma, husband of Tendo Akane. Do you, Shan
Pu, clan sister accept this lowly man, Luan Ma, as your husband?
Oh, that's going to go over real well.
Nodoka looked at her daughter and knew something was up.
"Alright dear,
Alright, dear,
Cologne watched the girl's response, mildly surprised. She knew
that Ranko, while still Ranma, had killed Saffron.
Thought he had for a moment. Saffron survived.
With a snort, he turned to face his judges. She did the same.
"How do you plea?"
plead?"
And the answer is, on your knees. ^_^
"That's quite enough." The same woman spoke again. "You've made
things very easy for us, Mu Tsu. There is only one penalty for the
willful disobedience of an Elder by a male.
Bring out the comfy chair!
"It has merit, but justice must be served. As an Elder, you know
how much our society depends upon our laws and traditions." Again
Nail Polish leaned towards Cologne, this time emphasizing her words
with sharp hand gestures. "Quit wasting our time, Cologne. Tells us
what you have planned and we will discuss it. We are not the
teenagers you've become used to manipulating."
They're now old women she's used to manipulating.
"It has been judged and agreed to. Let it be done tonight!"
Hair Dryer rapped the table in front of her and stood up.
Interesting resolution.
colored background with a rural scene upon it. In the floor playing
with a doll, a little girl happily sat. Her long black hair bounced
as she looked up at Ranko. A muffled recognition bloomed in her eyes.
She pulled a knife from out of her sleeves and threw it at Ranko. It fell
point first in the floor four feet in her.
"I guess some things never change," she said.
She stood up and toddled over to her.
"Hi, me
Hi. Me
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Author's Notes:
I also planned on finishing the weddings and more in this
chapter. However, my writing time is limited and this was a very nice
stopping point.
Lastly, I'm not really happy with Mousse's punishment.
Nah. It works, given the circumstances.
nice work.
D.B. Sommer