<<Hehe thanks. I've tried desperately to stay away from the "pulsing love
staff" variety of lemon dialogue.>>
I dunno...I can actually see May reading those god-awful Harlequin romance
novels in her spare time....I can totally see a scene of May enjoying
some...*ahem*...quality time with a favored novel.....^_^;;
<<sometimes it's hard to be sauve during sex :). However, if the
dialogue doesn't fit the characters and scene, I can make it more
conventional.>>
How true. *sigh* The one bit that really jumped out and slapped me was Ken
saying, "Baby got back!" I cannot imagine Ken ever saying that in character,
for any reason, no matter how drunk he was at the time. That just doesn't
strike me as a "Ken" thing to say. But hey, I'm not the author, so feel free
to consider me a foo'. You have my permision. ^_~
<<I apologize for leaving out the "Rally rape angst" scene, but to be honest
I haven't written it yet. As my message header said, I am coming back to
this story after a large absence, and needed to get input to get the
neurons firing again.>>
Forgiven and completely understood.
<<The other option that I'm still considering is have Roy make some advances
to Rally, and have her freak out that way. What's your thought?>>
I like that. It fits with their characters, and it would work well, IMHO. I
would say, completely off the cuff, that you should go with that.
<<I feel that Rally is a way old school SNL fan, and pretty much hates the
present day crap :).>>
Right on! The possibilities are endless...I can only imagine what could come
of Rally being a fan of the Samurai Deli skit....hehehehehe...
Anyway, if you need a pre-reader, I would love to do the deed. This looks
like a promising bit of fanfiction. Write on, man! Power to the people!
Captain Exposition