Sorry, couldn't resist adding some comments to my own fic, as I didn't have too much time when I first posted it. If that sorta thing annoys you, delete this now.

The next episode will have less introduction of characters and setting (necessary in a first episode), and more actual plot, along with revealing some of what I hinted at. Ruri Matsushira will be properly introduced, and some creepy stuff will happen. Stay tooned, it does get better. (No, don't just go off and watch Powerpuff Girls. Oh, okay, if you must.)

upcoming trials. However, soon afterwards, Ikari was committed to a state
facility and deemed mentally unfit to give evidence.

What do you mean you never even once thought he should be commited? :)

"Major Misato Katsuragi, and Dr. Ritsuko Akagi, while charged under the UN's
provisions for posthumous convictions in relation to this affair (a special
and controversial dispensation, specifically restricted to members of SEELE
and NERV)

I know this is a bit (read 'seriously') dodgy, but I had to do it! :) It seemed sort of unfair that Ritsuko at least should get away without even a slap on the wrist, and keep in mind the matter of Rei and her origins. They might be able do that for Ritsuko too ya know....

"Asuka Langley Sohryu was killed while piloting EVA-02 against the EVA Units
05-13. Her remains were returned to her native Germany in accordance with
her will.

This is major assumption on my part as to the contents (hell, even existence) of Asuka's will, but I figured it would've been pretty close...

"Toji Suzuhara was killed in a car crash in 2038, along with his wife and
young daughter.

I intentionally leave it to the reader to decide who he marries.

"Of those involved in this affair, only Fuyutski and Ikari remain alive
today. Fuyutski has returned to Japan and is currently in a rest home in the
north of Hokkaido. He has been diagnosed with terminal cancer of the liver,
and is extremely ill.

Hmm, funny that, how both Gendo *and* Fuyutski get cancer... That couldn't possibly be a bad, bad teaser, could it.....:)

reports and legal documents run under his hands. One particular photograph
captures his attention, paperclipped to a personnel report and

Again, I deliberately leave it to the reader to decide who it is. Could be Asuka, could be Gendo, could be Misato, could be Rei, could be anyone. Hell, could be himself...

slightly ahead of the exterior. Kia stands in front of a print of an
impressionist's portrait of J.D. Shapely as the receptionist greets him.

Heh. I love Gibson rip-offs :).

Reaching the
door of 2.18, he glances past the name 'S. Ikari' on the door, above which a
plastic heart proclaims that this is 'Shinji-chan's lovely room', in
hand-scrawled kanji. Kia knocks.

Remember that from the series? Ah, bad self-referencing...

The attendant unlocks the door with her key, ushering him in and then
leaving. He closes the door.
"Hello Asuka. May I sit?"

Oooh, spooky, talkin' to the deahd! *mimes ghost and hums the Scooby-Doo music* Yes, I know, its an exploitative teaser, but I WILL explain it. Later.

the nano-tech Giegeresque style of the post-Second Impact twenty-hundreds

Again, bad Gibson rip-off.

Major
Ruri Matsushira, the woman in direct control of the EVAs in combat.

And perfect replacement for everyone's favorite warm-water penguin owner.

Hitomi supposed that Lowside was probably the closest thing the 2050s had to
the almost legendary Kowloon Walled City of pre-Chinese Hong Kong, or the
anthill-like Bridge community of San Francisco. Tokyo-4 had been the

Yes, Lowside IS a direct and blatant rip-off of Gibson's Bridge. Inter-stitial (sp?) communities are essential to any bad futuristic story. This one just happens to have an abandoned Geo-Front underneath it. :)

she might one day have to live here, leaving the beauty of Tokyo-5, were
Gernsback met Gieger in the gleaming black shapes of the modern

The Gernsback style (aka Raygun-Gothic, and demonstrated perfectly in William Gibson's 'The Gernsback Continuum'.{*slaps self* Stop it! Bad! No more Gibson rip-offs for you!})is basically the same style as the covers of all those old 'Amazing Science Fiction'-type magazines.

Tokyo-5, like Tokyo-3, was designed to fold into the ground, but in a more
natural sliding and spiralling fashion.

I know this is only relevant to a small no. of readers (if any), but if you've read it, think of Sagramoso(sp?) City in Ian Watson's 'Space Marine'.

shadow of NERV. Then Hitomi and the other pilots had been sworn into the
UNAERG, given the honorary yet still intimidating rank of Lieutenants in the
JSSDF, and Ruri had been revealed as Major Matsushira, their

Now the rank is also seriously dodgy, but I wasn't 1 million % sure of an appropriate one. If you've got an alternate suggestion, tell me.

Pan out from Lowside. Let the spider's web of Lowside join the more blocky,
grid-like areas of Tokyo-4. Pan out further, let the nano-tech

Ah, camera directions, a most useful tool when describing landscapes. Sorry if that annnoyed anyone though.
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