I have to agree with the others, the Crow has been done. Something from
Japanese myth would be better.
Also, considering the personalities of the other members of the cast, I am
very surprised that Akane lived long enough for the state to kill her. I
think that she would not last long after Ranma's death. I can very easily
see Shampoo or Ukyou charging her in the street yelling "Akane Tendo,
prepare to die!" and then suceeding.
Even if you have her taken into custody right away, I think one of them
would get to her.
I did think your writing was good, its just the plot that needs re-working.
Keep up the good work, I look forward to more from you
Peggy