Hmmm...sorry I didn't respond to this earlier...busy life, y'know?
Well. I'm not a huge fan of lemons as a rule, but this was rather good, ATC.
Excellent dialogue all the way across. I did think the nipple-twisting piece
was a bit far-fetched tho'. If you're trying to stick to canon-esque
behavior, Rally would never have responded in kind, IMHO. The screaming was
nicely in character...^_^ The only other point of contention was, the
aftermath of Rally's admission about the rape is seriously underplayed. May
is shocked, and the next morning..nothing. Off to the shower to beat off
without a second thought for her friend? And Rally doesn't seem too worked up
about it after the fact either. I would think she'd be a bit more agitated
after telling someone such a personal secret.
I think I have a fair idea where you are going with this story...I like
it. Good job, and write more! Do it! Do it now! Captain Exposition sez! ^_~
Oh yeah...and Rally is a SNL fan? Hilarious!!!!!!!
Captain Exposition
and his ancient SIG....
l>-------Double Vision and Dinner & Desire--------<l
"For when you absolutely, positively have to waste every mutha-fu**a in the
room..."
Samuel L. Jackson, Jackie Brown