Subject: [FFML] Re: [Fic][TKOContest][Ranma]One Month
From: "Ammadeau" <roy.fokker@unspacy.org>
Date: 2/22/2000, 3:50 AM
To: chengdo@home.com
CC: ffml@fanfic.com

Well, I said if you'd write this that I'd send you comments, and I

always try to keep my word.  All comments that follow are of course

my opinion only.



On Mon, 21 Feb 2000 16:42:42 -0700 Donny Cheng <chengdo@home.com> wrote:

Disclaimer:  All characters portrayed in this story are the property of 

Rumiko Takahashi and co.



This story takes place after volume 38 of the Ranma manga and also draws 

ideas from the anime.



C & C welcomed.



One Month



By



Donny Cheng



"You want me to what?" Ranma asked, staring disbelievingly at his three 

suitors.



Kodachi, Kuno, and the Tea Ceremony Guy? :)



Seriously, one sentence worth of setting would add nicely to this.



"She's ruining my business.  She comes by like clockwork everyday to my 



Avoid repeating she by giving the reader a hint of who you mean,

like 'That hyper (something)'



restaurant.  My grades slipped a bit because of that time I was sick, 



because I was ill,



not because of my job," Ukyo growled.  "No matter what I say, she won't 

listen and keeps coming by to tell me 'I'm ruining my education'.  It 



if it's in quotes, it should be 'You're ruining your education.'



wouldn't be so bad if she didn't scare my student customers away.  On 



How does she scare them away?  That'd be an interesting detail.



top of that, when she turns small again, she keeps eating all my food 



turns small?  more like turns into a child.



and never pays me."



"Shampoo no know what problem is.  One arrow and nobody care teacher is 

gone.  Ranma teacher come by one more time to bother Nekohanten and say 

Shampoo is 'truant', give Kiss of Death again."



Its her fault for playing basket ball with them that time. :)



Ranma shuddered at the damage to the surrounding people, namely him, if 



'damage to the surrounding people' sounds very odd to me.  Not entirely

sure what you mean.



Shampoo started hunting Hinako while he was at school.  Definitely not 



She wouldn't stand a chance.  Tried it and failed in the manga, even

when Kodachi and Ukyo were helping her.



an option.  Still it might be a better option than him going directly 

after Hinako himself.  "You too, Akane?"



"Just do it," Akane grumbled.  She didn't like the prospect of Ranma 

touching Hinako _there_, but at the moment, she had no other choice.  

The woman was getting on her nerves.  The teacher had taken to calling 

her 'daughter' in class.  Hinako saw it as her duty to help her in her 



Oh, that's just hilarious. :)



problem areas; Home Economics and Swimming.  So far she had burned down 

the class room twice and swimming practice was worse than the last

time.  

The blind leading the blind as they say.



Seems your word wrap is a bit off.



"Okay, okay.  So I get one month of free food at Ucchan's and at 



and the



Nekohanten and Akane'll do my homework for a month?"



*Win-win situation.  Get rid of Hinako and have Ranma to myself for a 

month,* the three girls thought together, coincidently.



The downside though, at least for Ranma, is he has to grab at her

breasts again, and strengthen his reputation as a total perv.



			* * * * *



Day One...



"Give it up already!" Ranma yelled and sidestepped another of Hinako's 

errant ki blasts.



"I see you have not yet learned from your ways...," Hinako started say 



"I see you haven't learned..."



when Ranma's image disappeared again.  *Damnit where is he?*



*Damnit, where





She hated it when her alter ego fell for such stupid tricks.  She looked 



So she's really two people in one body, rather than getting an uncontrolable

emotional adjustment?



around her but could only see a dozen of her mirror images reflected 

back at her.  *Really, a fun house?  How stupid can I get.*



"Gotcha!"



"Wha...?" Hinako found herself tackled to the ground by one of her own 

images apparently.  She gasped as she felt the excess chi she had gotten 

>from the carnival goers drain from her body.  "You can remove your hands 



But why did she drain them?  She normally has a reason for it.



>from my body now, Ranma.  Clever plan, dressing up as me."



She's unusually calm about this.



"Yeah, smart of me, if I do say so myself...," Ranma gloated before 

noticing that his audience was gone.



"Mister?  Is this yours?" a vendor asked when Ranma left the room of 

mirrors.  The vender held up a giggling young Hinako by the scruff of 

her collar.  "That'll be two hundred yen for the cotton candy."



Presents her like a baby, but she isn't quite that young.  Besides,

if he held her like that, she'd fall right out of her dress.



Ranma sighed.  A whole month of this?



* * * * *



Day Seven...



This wasn't working out.  She had to do something.  It seemed her alter 

ego would never learn, always stuck with the mindset of when she was 

that age.  Why couldn't she have been one of those nice and proper 

little girls back then?



I don't see this big a difference between the two personalities,

esp considering how she tries to bag Soun.



*Why me?* Ranma thought to himself as he finally let go of the Hinako.  

Another little thing that Happosai forgot to mention was that with each 

increasing day, the length of time he had to hold those shiatsu points 

became longer.  "Hey, I didn't do anything more than I had to!" Ranma 

yelled when he saw Hinako's face down, not looking at him.



Hinako looked up from her thoughts and stared at Ranma's blushing face.  

*Of course!  I might not be able to control myself as a little girl that 

well, but I can sure as hell control my adult mind.*  "Well that was 

fun, see you tomorrow lover boy," Hinako said deliberately in as low a 



"Well, that was fun.  See you tommorrow, lover boy," Hinako said in a low,

seductive voice.



seductive voice as she could.  She almost laughed out loud when she saw 

his blush deepen.



			* * * * *



Day Eight...



"Oh!  Ah... harder... please!  Oh, for the love of god, harder," Hinako 

moaned.



'for the love of god' is a very odd thing to say in this sitation.



*Ear plugs.  Need ear plugs,* Ranma thought weakly as he held on and 

tried to count the seconds till he could feel the ki leave her body.  He 

was damned glad that only the two of them were in the classroom at this 

late hour.



Not noticing Nabiki armed with her trusty camera. :)



			* * * * *



Day Nine...



While Ranma could not hear anything, he didn't really need to.  He had 

tried closing his eyes so that he couldn't see Hinako's suggestive 

looks.  However, neither helped the sensations his body felt from 

Hinako's writhing body.  He had heard that thinking of baseball stats 

helped in this sort of situation.  Pity he didn't know any.



Try cold water, should be even more effective for Ranma.



			* * * * *



Day Fifteen...



Hinako stopped squirming around and sighed.  Her tactic was simply not 

working.  Even when she had taken to wearing kids' clothes that fit her 

alter ego just right, but threatened to rip on her adult frame, Ranma's 

grip didn't budge an inch.  A part of her had to give grudging respect 

to him for his ability to ignore her.  But respect or not, she was not 

going to lose a part of herself she had become accustomed to over the 

years.  However, there were only fifteen more days and she had no idea 

how she would stop him.  Her dread was that there was no way to stop 

this.



I can think of at least a dozen other things she could try.



Besides, Ranma is used to Shampoo latching on to him naked all the time,

he's built up a certain endurance.



			* * * * *



Day Sixteen...



Ranma was surprised as Hinako simply stood there in the middle of the 

classroom.  He was not one to let an opportunity like this slip away.  

He mentally strengthened his will.  While he didn't know baseball stats, 

he did know intricate forms of kata that took quite a bit of 

concentration to think of.  He was more surprised when by the time ten 

minutes was up and the ki within her body dissipated that Hinako had 

stood there the entire time.



"Are you finished?  If you are, I'm leaving."



Ranma couldn't help but wince at the sound of her cold voice.



			* * * * *



Day Seventeen...



"Look, at least put up a fight," Ranma said, trying hard not to outright 

beg her.  It was starting to annoy him how she stood there like a limp 

doll.  He felt as if he were picking on a defenseless woman instead of 

someone that could blow up the whole city.



No, that would be Saffron.  She's not quite that powerful.



"Why?  So you'll feel better about what you are robbing me of?"



"Look, you're a menace."



"For doing my job?"



She's the Dirty Harry of the educational world. :)



"For, well...," Ranma hesitated, trying to think of something that 

Hinako was doing wrong.  Despite his attempts at stopping Hinako, the 

woman did nothing different from her daily activities.  She still 

stopped by and tried to convince Cologne to make Shampoo go to school.  

Ukyo and Akane were still bothered if their academic studies caused them 

to fall behind.  "It's not when you're like this, it's when you're 

small.  You know how much of a pain you are like that?"



Sana appears suddenly and flattens Ranma with a mallet. :)



Hinako ignored him.  She had heard of how Ranma hated his curse and 

wanted nothing to do with it from some of the students.  How could he 

possibly understand what she felt?



You know Taro is the same way Hinako is about his curse...



When Ranma finally released her, Hinako gave him a cold stare.  "See you 

tomorrow.  You have an appointment with me after class before our little 

match.  It seems your grades are dropping even further from the pitiful 

level they were at before."



Ranma felt lower than dirt.



			* * * * *



Day Eighteen...



"Don't you want to be cured?  When I'm done with the treatment, you'll 

be adult the whole time.  I know the time you stay as an adult is longer 

now even after your supply of battle aura is empty.  I mean, you're 

actually helping Akane in the kitchen and in the pool now that you can 

actually last the whole class before you turn small.  Heck, battle aura 



Too many 'actually'



>from Gosunkugi is enough to last you a whole hour."  The silence and 

Hinako's inert body was his only reply.  He was tempted to just forget 

about the whole deal and let the woman run rampant.



Hinako didn't know why she decided to speak right then to a person that 

had no way of understanding her.  But with her time trickling down, she 

found she needed to get some things off her chest.  "Do you know what 

it's like to be a child?  I am still me when I am in my child form.  

It's just that my mental age is frozen in that state.  My mind can't 

accept all the knowledge and experience I've gained."



"That sound horrible."  One of Ranma's recurring nightmares was of his 

girl half having a mind of her own.



"Maybe, but I think of it as a blessing.  I get to see sides of people I 

would never have seen in my adult form.  I would never have known what a 

wonderful man Akane's father was, for example.  Oh, don't look at me 

like that.  He _is_ nice, but I know that I have no chance of competing 

against his dead wife and it would be improper to push it.  My alter ego 

doesn't suffer from such inhibitions though.  When young, I only 

remember him being nice to me and I can see him whenever I want."



Her adult form doesn't have an inhibitions either though.



She rolled her eyes when Ranma still had that semi-disgusted look on his 

face.  "It's not just him.  Other adults and my students only see me as 

someone to leer at, to be jealous of, or to be feared.  When young, I'm 

treated nicely by nearly everyone I meet, no matter how annoying as you 

say I might be."



By everyone?  Hard to believe.



Ranma should be able to sympathize, perhaps even envy this considering

his own childhood.



"Not everyone is like that," Ranma said.  The last thing he needed was 

to feel sorry for her.



She smiled wryly.  "What better way to escape some of reality's 

harshness than as a small child.  By the way, you can let go now.  The 

ki was gone a couple of minutes ago and my breast is starting to hurt."



Ranma let go of her so fast, Hinako nearly tripped over backwards.  

"You're the only boy in Furinkan that would do that," Hinako chuckled.  

"Well, see you tomorrow, Ranma."



"Yeah, see you tomorrow," Ranma said, for the third time this week 

leaving in an unhappy state.  The food and excuse to be with Akane was 

starting to not be worth it.



Wait, she does his homework with him there?  How do they ever get

anything done? :)



			* * * * *



Day Twenty Two...



"You're seriously going to recite the rules of English diction right 

now?" Ranma asked, annoyed.



"You're grades are getting worse.  This outside activity you have is not 

doing anything to help.  It's now taking a hour to apply the treatment.  



An hour?  His hand would get tired long before then.



I might as well tutor you while you're at it."



Ranma would never understand the woman.  Just a couple of days ago, 



Ranma would never understand women, period.  Why is this case special?



Hinako came to school with a bad 24 hour cold.  She could easily not 

have come to school and make him start over again.  She never missed a 

Sunday to tutor at the school for kids that were behind.  When he was 

late cleaning up the classroom that other day, she was still in the room 

finishing up her work.  Never once did she try to avoid him by changing 

her schedule.  And here she was ready to drill more stuff into him.



"Louder.  Breathe.  Watch your tones.  Make sure you make the 

distinction between the 'l' and 'r' sounds."



"Why are you torturing me like this?" Ranma asked plaintively.



"I'm your teacher.  I want the best for all my students," Hinako said 

simply.



			* * * * *



Day Twenty Three...



"No, I'll wait."



"Thank you, Ranma-kun," Hinako said and went back to marking the test 

papers.  "I'm almost finished."



Ranma frowned.  Lately, Hinako was treating him nicer.  He wondered what 



nicer than before.



kind of game she was playing.  If it was to make him feel guilty, it was 



If she was trying to make him



working.  It wreaked havoc with his concentration, so much so that he 

couldn't even bring up a basic kata in his mind.  While she no longer 

made suggestive body movements, he still could not get over the fact 

that he was hugging a full bodied woman with one of his hands over her 



find it a bit hard to believe that his fiancees could hold back on their

rampant jealousy in all this time.  At least Kodachi, whose not in on

this deal, would have made some noise.



breast.  "Why don't you fight me anymore?  You didn't answer me the 

other time.  I mean, I have to hold you longer, you could probably have 

a chance to stopping me."



Hinako looked up from her work.  "You'd just lock my hands in place like 

you did with that basketball hoop the first time.  I prefer not to be 

held like that for that long a period time.  Besides, you're stronger 

than me."



"Still...."  *Still what?* Ranma asked himself.  He could still remember 

her words.  She was right that time; it would make him feel better.



			* * * * *



Day Twenty Seven...



"You know you could just discipline students another way," Ranma said, 

trying to sound offhand about it and failing.



"That's actually sweet of you, Ranma," Hinako said, surprised that he 

was actually giving her hints on how to escape him now.  "If you don't 

want to do it, just stop."



Ranma could just imagine the angry looks of his suitors.  They were 

already annoyed by the fact that it took longer to cure Hinako each



He's holding on to Hinako's goods for an hour each day and they're

just annoyed?



day.  

He got the hint that there better be something at the end of all this or 

he was going to be in it deep.  "Trust me, that is not an option."



"Look at me Ranma."  She laughed when she saw him looking at and then 



me, Ranma."



adverting his eyes when they roamed into her cleavage.  The boy was 

really too cute.  Even after all this time of holding her, he still 

hadn't gotten used to it.  She wondered if that said something about her 

appeal or his own ineptness.



Or the fact that he changes into a girl and is thus used to seeing

ceavage at this point.



"I didn't mean literally.  No boy in the school would take me seriously 

if not for my skills.  Many of them are starting to lose their fear of 

me.  It doesn't take much battle aura to turn adult now.  I'm stuff full 

before I even suck two students of their aura.  Even blasting my excess 

ki out with Happo Tsurisen Gaeshi doesn't help.  Thanks to your 

treatment, I stay as an adult for hours now even without the battle 

aura."



But she only really needs it for Ranma, Kuno, and the occasional visitor.

The other students are intimidated by her voice alone.



"Ah."  There wasn't really anything more he could say.  He suddenly felt 

Hinako's head fall against his body, causing the both of them to 

collapse on the ground.  *Damn, she hasn't attacked me in so long, I 

wasn't ready.*  However, Hinako did nothing to pull herself from his 

grasp.  She just lay overtop him inert.  He felt something wet seep into 

the cloth covering his shoulders where Hinako was.  *She's crying?* 

Ranma thought, panicking.



He'd hear he sobbing much sooner than that.



"I sucked some battle aura from some rowdy delinquents last night while 

I was walking home.  I couldn't go to sleep till midnight.  I waited and 

waited, but I couldn't turn young again.  I knew that this would happen 

eventually and I've been preparing myself for it, but...," Hinako 

whimpered, her voice muffled by Ranma's silk shirt.



She can't fall asleep if she's an adult?  Seems odd to me.  She's

much more energetic as a child.



Ranma lay there with her over him and found that he could not say a 

thing.  The only thing he could think of was to let her go.  But just as 

he released her, he could feel the ki drain away.  *Damn, if I let go 

just a little sooner...,* he thought belatedly.  Awkwardly, he tried to 

push the woman off of him, but found that she wrapped her arms around 

him during the fall.  "Hinako, your...," he stopped when he realized 

that his teacher had fallen asleep.



			* * * * *



Hinako woke up a few hours later and blushed when she found out where 

exactly she was.  Her arms had shrunk to that of a child's, making it 

easier for her to remove them from around Ranma-kun's back.  She sighed 

wistfully as she looked at his sleeping face.  He was _so_ handsome.



I thought she couldn't think about things like that when she was a

child.  How about 'nice' instead?



She turned around and cuddled against his body carefully, so that she 

didn't wake him, so that he would stay a little longer with her.  For 



Surprising no one has shown up to disturb them after all this time.



some reason she had this idea that he would be leaving her soon.  She 

never had anyone take spend so much time with her before, besides her 

parents, so she didn't like that thought.  For nearly a month, Ranma met 

her after school and was always trying to cure her; so sweet of him!



And her child form doesn't hate him since he's essentially killing her?



At first she was angry with him for trying to take her super cool attack 

away so that she couldn't take care of delinquents anymore, but nobody 

that bought her so much candy and was always nice to her could be bad 

she figured.  She guessed it might be because she always tried using it 

on him when he was being bad.  Such a naughty boy he was.  Well if he 

didn't like her shooting at him, she didn't feel too bad about being 

cured.  And it meant that he would play that hugging game with her that 

made her feel nice.



More like a groping game. :)



She looked up at the familiar ceiling of the classroom and could barely 



She could barely make out the familiar ceiling of the classroom above her.



make it out.  It was getting dark outside.  She giggled girlishly as she 



girlishly, thinking of the looks on the faces of Ranma's girlfriends.



thought of the look on Ranma's girlfriends' faces.  "Nyah, nyah," she 

taunted softly.  She supposed she should go and explain it to them that 

there was nothing happening between her and Ranma, absolutely nothing.  



How can her child-mind think in this way?



But the last time she did that, they all looked at her incredulously and 

nearly bit her head of saying, 'of course, nothing happened'.  The next 

day, Ranma came back with bruises and sulked at her instead of thanking 

her.  How rude!



*Oops,* she thought when she heard Ranma give an oomph when she elbowed 

him in the stomach.  Still, despite that he was angry with her, he still



despite being angry with her, 

 

brought her candy for class while some other students brought her 

apples; yuck!  He always looked so sad these days when he gave her 

candy.  He wouldn't even smile when she put a gold star on his cheek 

when he gave his oral English assignment.  She had this strange idea 



cheek after he passed his oral



that he would happier after three more days.  She hoped it was true.



			* * * * *



Day Twenty Eight...



"Ranchan, your hand!" Ukyo cried.  "Oh, what happened?"



"This isn't some trick so that you could start over with Hinako, is it?" 

Akane ask suspiciously, thinking back to the teacher's statement that 

nothing was happening between them and Ranma asking how they would feel 

if he stopped administering the counter technique.  She looked over at 

Ranma's fingers and they were definitely very red and bruised.  "Oh, how 

did that happen!  I'll go and get the nurse."  She ignored the 



I'll go get the nurse.



snickering from Sayuri and Yuka.



"Don't bother, it looks worse than it is.  I got careless this morning 

and blocked Kuno's bokken the wrong way," Ranma said, waving it off.  

"And about Hinako... this little problem won't stop me," Ranma said and 

tried his best to look unconvincing without looking unconvincing about 

it.  He failed of course, but the end result was still an unconvincing 

look and Ukyo immediately told him not to try it with Hinako tonight.



"But the whole project will be down the drain," Ranma grimaced, the pain 

in his hand made it quite easy for him to achieve that effect.



hand making it



"Don't worry about it.  I've caught up with my grades, Shampoo showed 

Hinako her Joketsuzoku grade twelve equivalency diploma, and well, Akane 



Actually, Shampoo has a double degree in cooking and martial arts from

Amazon U. :)



can swim with a lifesaver by herself and has a one in three chance of 

success with that curry dish.  She shouldn't be around to bother us 

anymore anyway.  We just saw that you had only a few days left and let 

you keep doing it so it wouldn't be a waste of time."



So they let him continue grope him for his own benefit?



*Actually, the three of us had each tried harder to please Hinako in 

case just such an occasion had happened.  Or at least I did,* Akane 

thought blushing at how far she went for him.



Woah!  Hinako and Akane?? O_o



Hinako watched the commotion in class, unwilling to use her technique 

for once.  Ranma-kun is hurt?  Oh, poor baby.  I wonder if he'll come 

and see me today.



			* * * * *



Day Thirty...



Ranma found himself staring down at Hinako, but somehow he felt as if he 

was being stared down at.  Her cute little face was marred by a crossed 

look.  "What did you want to see me after class for?"



"You're ignoring me!"



"No, I'm not.  I answered all your questions in class...," he was cut 

off as Hinako jumped at him and glomped onto him.



"Yes, you are.  You were going to go back home again today without 

playing with me just like the other two days."



"Uh, well about that... I decided you're better like this.  Until you're 

ready to let go of, well, when you find the right person for you, maybe 

he'll, well, you'll understand when you're older," Ranma said, knowing 



Sounds odd from a guy who acts as if he hasn't hit puberty yet.



how literally true that was.  He was slightly surprised and little 

disappointed that adult Hinako didn't mention anything to him at all 

about him not going after her with the cure anymore.



"I'm older than you, Ranma."



Ranma chuckled as her cherub face looked up at him with all

seriousness.  



up at him seriously.



"Not now you aren't...," no sooner than those words escaped his lips 

than he heard her whisper Happo Go-en Satsu and found himself being held 

very closely by an adult Hinako.



"And now?" Hinako asked archly.



"Y-You... from me," Ranma stuttered weakly and felt his battle aura 

removed.



"You've held me long enough and I figure it's time for payback," she 

smirked, but it didn't hold for long and she turned serious.  "I want to 



Repetition of a form of 'hold' is confusing here.



thank you for what you did.  I know you gave me many chances.  From 

giving me suggestions on avoiding you to not even holding me hard 



ditto with 'give'



anymore.  It's only a part of the truth when I said that you'd just over 

power me if I put up any fight.  The other reason was that I wanted to 

see if you'd do it.  Call it the teacher in me if you want, but I wanted 

to see if you'd grow.  Hard to believe, but the problem student I was 

called here to take care of is the student that I feel most fortunate to 

have."



Hinako felt Ranma slump limply against her.  "The sucking of your aura 

was punishment for what you put me through the first couple of weeks and 

ignoring me the last few days.  This," she looked down at their two 

bodies close together, "and this," she kissed him on his cheek, "are my 

thanks."  She then let him go and saw him staring wide eyed up at her 

>from the floor.  She took her time to move her legs so that the hem of 

her skirt was no longer over his line of sight.



"When I'm ready to let go of my youth and my power, I'll see you again.  

I'll remember your words," she promised and left him there to think of 

what she meant.  She de-aged when she reached outside school grounds and 

found herself merrily skipping back home.  *Not now, but maybe later, 

Ranma,* Hinako thought happily.  She was still too young at heart.



Besides the fact that Ranma wouldn't be at all ready for her, yet.

They both need some growing up to do.



			* * * * *



The End. (maybe)



Author's Notes:  This was written for the FFIRC montly one hour

challenge.  Unfortunately, I didn't get any where close to being done in

that amount of time and it ended up being five hours ^_^  *If you really

want to know, I ended at the end of Day Seventeen.*



Same reasons as Scott Schimmel for the [TKOContest], so here's another

:P



-- 

Anime Fanboy and Fanfiction Writer ^_^

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A sweet little story that ended on just the right note for me, though

I'd also like to see it continued.  I think its unique enough and

has enough story potential for a few more chapters.



You haven't lost your touch Donny.



Ammadeau



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