On Sat, 19 Feb 2000, Rebeka Thomas wrote this about
Rod M's "The Pursuit of Happiness" Prelude:
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Anybody else that
came to town wanting a free car was usually chased out by an
angry stampede of Pathfinders.
Things with wheels don't stampede. The word has onomatopoeiatic roots in
'stamp', and the sound of a stampede is vaguely like the word.
Yes, but what other word do you suggest? Traffic jam? Rush Hour traffic?
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<"I suppose you could argue that what you did to get
Shampoo's hand in marriage was nothing as bad as any of the
attempts Shampoo made at tricking Ranma into wedlock,"> said
Cologne. <"So you'd figure Shampoo would be a bit
understanding about things.">
I don't think it's IC for Cologne to admit her past hypocrisy.
BTW, it's convention to spell their names correctly if they're talking in
chinese. Mu Si [I think], Ke Lun, [not sure] and Shan Pu.
Actually, using Chinese mandarin pin ying, it would be Xian Pu.
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"Whoop, Blue Thunder's spotted the Red Express. Here
goes the collision."
I'm taking bets on whether Kuno mistakes Ranma's "intentions" towards
Kyoko.
"Foul Saotome, how dare you put your evil spell on a maiden as
young as she?!!" screams Kuno as he brandishes his bokken...
Something like that?
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A moment later, a girl wearing a Furinkan High school
uniform stepped into the room, looking a bit embarrassed.
Suggest: "a girl wearing a Furinkan High School boys' uniform", unless
that's
not the effect you're looking for. Otherwise, point out that it's a girls'
uniform, this IS Ukyou.
A moment later, a girl wearing a Toronto Maple Leafs uniform stepped into
the room, looking a bit embarrassed.
"C'mon, let's go," she said.
Ryouga blinked.
"Well?" the girl asked, frowning.
"Um... you're not going out in public wearing that, are you?"
"And why not?!" She stared at him, giving him a gaze that
could flash fry a buffalo in 7 seconds flat (But I want it fryed NOW! ^_^).
He blinked again. "You do know they're on a five game winless streak.."
"Yeah. So?" she asked moodily.
"So, um, well, they stink.." he said simply.
*CLANG*
And so a fuming Toronto Maple Leafs fan left the room, leaving
her male companion unconcious, slumped against the wall.
Sorry, couldn't resist writing that @_@.
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"Say, has Ukyou been kidnapped yet?" asked Hiroshi.
"Heard that Muhoshin fella did, a while back," replied
Daisuke.
Is it deliberate that this is the same last name as Kyoko from earlier in
this
fic?
Actually, he's referring to Ryo Muhoshin, the bishonen Gosunkugi look alike
that
had been in the fic earlier.
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- end prelude -
Man, no one writes a Ranma fic like Rod M does.
Phil Kwok, pot_roast@hotmail.com