A note on the form: a sestina is a poem formalized by the words
that
end lines. You are allowed six words to end a line, and they
must be
used in a specific order throughout the six stanzas and the
ending
three-line envoy. It sounds very simple, but once you try
you'll find
that writing a good, entertaining sestina is only slightly less
difficult than carving an exact replica of Michelangelo's
"David" out
of Mount Everest with a toothpick. Frankly, I don't know if
this one
is any good or not. But I thought I'd throw it out.
Well, it's a damn sight better than the one I had to come up
with back in my English class.... :)
Honestly, I can't really give C&C on this... or, at least,
not the criticism part. Poetry being what it is, and especially
sestina poetry, it's nigh-impossible to give anything other than
opinion... so that's what I'll do. :)
It's good. :)
Brian Payne
sofaspud@sofaspud.org
http://www.sofaspud.org