Jefferson Natividad wrote:
From: brewst <brewst@mediaone.net>
To: "ffml@fanfic.com" <ffml@fanfic.com>
Subject: [FFML] Advice Needed for Fic
Date: Tue, 15 Feb 2000 22:20:34 -0500
I have my 2nd fic loosly sketched out, and comments on plotline would be
appreciated:
Already written
-Ranma arrives in Kong Hong by Genma
-Ranma is sold into a whore-house by Genma
-Ranma escapes on the first night
-Ranma lives off the streets for four months
-Ranma is picked up and adopted by a leader of a triad
What is planned
-Ranma gets trained by various experts in martial arts, chi
techniques, and theft.
-Ranma grows to be a step-brother/close friend/potential lover to
Luan-Ko, who happense to resemble Ranko of the original series
potential lover? why not just make him a lover therefore pissing of
Taro which is lusting after Luan Ko
good idea.
-Ranma finds out about Genma's fraud/engagements and is so pissed off
that he becomes an assassin for the triad
-fast forward 5 years
-Ranma is now a pretty dangerous character: he's called Crazy Horse
because he gets a kick out of suicide attacks.
-Ranma is not chosen to follow his adopted father (now Chief
Dragon)as High Dragon of the triad. Instead, Taro is chosen.
-Taro and Ranma have a brawl that ends with them being seperated in an
explosion inside a parking structure.
-Ranma gets out, doesn't see Taro get out.
-Ranma goes to a bar to get piss drunk. Meets Genma.
-Ranma nearly kills Genma, only stops when Genma promises to teach him
Forbidden Techniques.
-Ranma goes to Jusenkyo with Genma. Genma falls into panda-pool.
-Ranma falls into uncursed pool, makes pool of drowned Ranma.
-Ranma and Genma go to Jotensuzuku. Ranma affianced to Shampoo. He
andRyoga (who fell into ? ) train under Cologne.
-Fastforward a couple of months to Nerima.
-Ranma arrives at Furinkan during fight, wins it. Realizes to his
dismay that he's hit Akane.
-Apologizes, he and Akane hit it off in a big bro-little sis way.
-Kuno interjects, Ranma pistolwhips him into unconsciousness.
-In class, Ranma finds out about engagement (Soun told the girls
earlier, the day before). Kuno charges in, Ranma leads him out
window, hangs on by fingers, Kuno goes for a swim.
Here's where my scene-by-scene script ends.
Future events-
Ryoga shows up (drowned ?)and he and Ranma fight it out
Luan-Ko (who fell into ?) arrives, trying to get hitched to Ranma
Shampoo shows up, not sure about Ukyo
Ranma meets Happosai and likes him, learns from him
Taro, who followed Ranma and fell into the Ranmaniichuan, tries to
kill Ranma through assassins.
Ranma returns to Hong Kong with crew, defeats Ryoga but wounded
Bursts into Taro's room with guns, end.
Alternate endings whether he won/lost, etc.
Like the story by the looks of the outline. If you want a pre-reader I'm
willing to oblige. This looks more interesting than your first fic.
sure. thanks
That's all
Jeff
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