Jerico Mele wrote:
While procrastinating on a paper I decided to do some C&C to get my mind
off the femme fatale archetype:
None of that here.
Re:[FFML] [fanfic][TM!] Vacation Days Chapter 9
by: DB Sommer <sommer@3rdm.net>
Comments: Another fine installment of Vacation days. Ryouko and Ayeka
continue to be comic relief
True, but in this case they're unwittingly saving the day (or at least
Tenchi and Mihoshi's lives) ^_^
while Mihoshi manages to be serious and
remain In Character.
Thank you.
You might be killing people off a little too fast,
Well, since you'll be relieved to know that's going to end, largely in part
because virtually everyone is dead now.
however, especially considering the amount of time you spent building
them. I like how what might have been a silly series turned into a very
serious one without any loss of the story's flow.
I tried to make it a bit of both by balancing between the two. That was
always something I liked about the OVA series, the mix of serious and
humor.
Characterization and
formatting are fine and Stargrave's past is a nice touch.
Thanks. Considering how close it came to his end it may have felt a bit
'wasted' for lack of a better term, but I thought it best to fully reveal
it only at the climax. Though I did try leaving enough clues in previous
chapters that I hoped people would have been able to piece together the
jist of it, if not the exact details.
Highly
recommended.
Thanks for the comments.
D.B. Sommer