From: William Morse
So far my only real nit is with Kima. I think you might have
a slight plot
hole regarding how The Commonwealth was able to gain access
to Akane's DNA
That's aright, you just overlooked it. Go back to part 1 when Kima is
leaving the lab planet. Read the part about them shipping a body with
uncanny resemblance to you-know-who...
Wilde, regarding how the springs have survived being transplanted from
earth, I recall you mentioning in part 1 or 2 about how water removed from
the springs loses its effects or something like that. So how about
transplanting the SOURCE instead? Instead of being in waterproof containers,
you could mention that there are holes at the bottom of the containers. No
attempt to investigate where they lead was successful.