Nice work. ^^
Thank you.
Hehe, I may not be the best, but I'm very close to being the fastest
to write C&C on ffml... as long as I'm not asleep or away from my
computer. ^^
COMMON SENSE:"GET A LIFE! IDIOT!"
Sheesh! what's with that today? Well, I'll just ignore it like always ^^
...
Ahem.
Now, For the most part I like your writing, although you seem to have
a thing for Heroic Ryoga. Hey, who of us doesn't have a soft spot for
a tragic hero?
I'm trying to tone that part down. I have been over doing
it.
Mm
The thing is, this is very much NOT the canon Ryoga. Which, while
sweet in many ways, is a complete moron.
Obsesive to the point of ignorance, yes. Moron, not quite.
Well, to put it negatively, he's obsessive, manic-depressive, not-quite
homicidal person with a bit weak grasp of reality, with the tendencity to
be too impulsive and aggressive. Also, he's naive to the point of idiocy,
but then again, Ranma's too. And I like Ryoga, despite his faults. Actually,
he's pretty buddy-buddy with Ranma at the end of manga, then again, so's
Mousse too. ^^
Nearly as bad as Tatewaki,
Not even close.
Tatewaki's a bit less naive, more hormone-crazed, he's a snob
and he has even weaker grasp of reality than Ryoga. Also,
he has his good sides, like all of the characters of R1/2.
There's no bad guys there. Well, exept Saffron.
Personally, I don't think Kuno's insane, like many portray him.
even. Although having Ashram poured through his head surely made
him wisen up, this is still too much.
Well, being released from a demonic posesion would do that
too.
Point. And what I'd like to see of Ryoga, is not the
"RANMA! PREPARE TO DIE" - cliches, but some of his other vices, rather.
Errs in judgement and such.
Personally, I think you're selling Ranma cheap. Even without truly
changing
anything he does, you could work with the description and dialogue more,
to make him seem more likable. Especially, since his behavior reflects
none
of what I've seen of Parn. I mean, if you have something against Ranma,
why did you use him in the first place?
If it seems like I have something against Ranma, sorry.
He's just easy to pick on with his "I'm the best" attitude.
Actually, especially with Parn in him, he should be more "I'll never give
up".
I mean, Parn is the one who went to Slayne and told that he was going
on a training trip because in the battle with the goblins he realized how
bad
he was.(Manga storyline).
Also, since people keep pestering you about the Drizzt/Ranma dueling,
why don't you have them set a date somewhere in the (far?) future and
have a duel then, with plenty of time for Ranma to prepare and train,
and this way Drizzt wouldn't have to be worried about another Entreri
situation. You could deal with the fight in the final chapter or in an
epilogue
this way, and decide the outcome from the character developement during
the fic.
battles, since winning in a serious situation is 90% attitude and 10%
technique.
Um, Drizzt is also slightly faster.
Mm. I�'ll take your word for that.
Hard to tell when crossing characters from series with different
realism levels.
Still, Don't sell your Ranma cheap.
Working on it
^^