Just some added C&C to go along with the C&C...

From: "Gentleman Caller" <gcaller@hotmail.com>
To: ffml@fanfic.com
Subject: [FFML] C&C Re: [fanfic][Eva][Lemon] Ritsuko's Device part 1
Date: Thu, 10 Feb 2000 10:25:28 MST

From: "David Eddy" <dje@progress.com>

     Taking the lubricated speculum, Ritsuko pulled Asuka
apart more fully with her gloved hand and inserted the
duck-billed instrument into her vagina a short way.  A
gasp greeted the penetration, which she ignored, and
briefly she squeezed on the speculum's handle, parting
the instrument's tongs so she could see up Asuka's tunnel
as she checked for any deformities.

    So _that_'s what a Speculum is, hm?  Might want to put a bit of a
description further up for those of us men who have no clue.

hmm... may be safe to say, if you don't know what a speculum is, you shouldn't be reading this. Dontchya think?

     Sliding her door closed with a sigh, Asuka leaned
back against it and closed her eyes.  Curse that rotten
device!  She had no idea what it was doing to her, but it
was doing *something*, and now it had become almost
unbearable.

    Thus comes the sex.  Nice job... Although I've never been a genius girl
who's read too many books, this does all strike me as realistic.  Asuka's
just controlling enough to, once she got used to having the simulation body
inside of herself, explore what was going on so that she would be in
control.  (At least, mostly in control. :)

I think she would have been a lot more freaked out at first. I mean, who here didn't have all logic go out the window the first time (err) "that" happened...

     Sitting at her desk in school, Asuka thanked Gott in
Himmel that the stupid 'simulation body' - actually a
cruel joke, she now thought - seemed to have become more
bearable.  It had been all she could do to stifle her
gasps during class, but somehow she had made it through
the morning.

    Might be interesting to insert someone who's caught on to what's
happening with her.  I don't know who, really, but you'ld think someone
might catch on... possibly whoever sits behind her in class.

I would at least think someone would wonder why her eyes keep rolling back in her head...  teacher may take it as an insult, yunnow...

...to be continued...

Please do!

Yes yes yes... sooner rather than later!

-qpr3

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