You wrote:
Hmm. I usually leave a space between the begining and end of statements
held between two dashes. Is connecting them the correct way to do it, or
can it work either way?
Using two dashes with no space is the "correct" way, but actually it's
not a very good way anyway. Commas, parentheses, even ellipses would
look better.
Thanks for the clarification.
further.
You're on your own from now on." Autolycus turned and headed back
the way
they had come.
A nice show of integrity here. I like it.
When you get to be a couple of million years old, you realize the
transitionary nature of galatic empires. Personal integrity lasts longer
than them, in Autolycus's case.
Ah. So Autolycus really is...Autolycus. Cool.
Or at least a reasonable facsimile. ^_^
It just has to do with where she grew up.
Does that mean she wilts in a hot desert?
Nah. She just starts thinking like a cactus and doesn't mind the heat.
She's good and adjusting her mindset like that.
*Um, DB, you forgot to tag this one...* *gets hysterical*
It wouldn't fit in the subject line. Sorry.
What? [Eating Sausages]?
That too.
I'm considering a brief 'outtakes' section featuring the strip club scene
with all three girls. Could be fun. I suppose it will depend on how I feel
when I'm done.
Got away with it, did he? Hm.
Well, Mihoshi made sure to lay down the law by getting him to say she
could
do whatever she wants. now she's giving him a consession too.
Since, after all, she didn't like going there all that much.
Oh, she liked the sausages and female bonding experiences well enough
before. It would just be tainted for her now because of Tenchi's reaction.
"I see."
"I have a marker if you want to try and draw your eyebrows back on."
LOL!!!
*offers Tenchi some of Cologne's salve...oops, that's my story*
But a good one, though his his pride was burned worse than his body. His
eyebrows though, they were gonners.
The segue from Mihoshi discussing the setting on her phaser to the
explosive rocks reminded me of that old Star Trek episode. You know,
the one with VAAL?
The rocks that were landmines and took out one of the cannon fodder/red
shirts? Yep. had a really old computer running the entire planet, as I
recall.
I already gave the explanation for that one in the reply to DF.
I'm surprised that Tenchi doesn't lose his lunch. After all, he's never
shed blood before.
He is made of stern stuff. Saw 'Faces of Death' 1-4 in a marathon too. ^_^
(Although given that it's an energy weapon I
question whether there would be much blood as opposed to the distinctive
smell of scorched flesh.
I did consider that, but I confess to taking some possible licence since I
wanted Tenchi to have to truly consider what he had done by making it
graphic when compared to Kaggy's death.
Saw that one coming, but I LIKE it
Cool. Although I'd be concerned if I were you, Kara. If you can start to
predict my actions, that might mean you're begining to think more like
me.
Ask anyone; this is probably not a good thing. ^_^
However I think there should have been a bit about how now Mihoshi would
have to arrest him for assaulting a police officer.
Heh. That would have been a good one.
There was one thought that occured me, though. If somebody clocked
Mihoshi just as she was about to relieve herself, wouldn't she lose
control of bodily functions? Or at least desperately need to go when
she regained consciousness?
Oops! I hadn't thought of that. It is a good point. Let me think about how
I might modify things slightly.
Thanks for the additional comments.
D.B. Sommer