Subject: [FFML] Re: [FFML][teaser][Xenogears] Trailer for Power, Truth, and Love
From: "Brian Yaple" <byapes@erie.net>
Date: 1/20/2000, 7:20 PM
To: "Joshua Loomis" <cougar_chan@yahoo.com>
CC: <ffml@fanfic.com>
Reply-to:



Konnichwa, 

I've been following this fanfic for a while, as a fello Xeongears addict
and fanfic writer, and I have got to say its been good.  But I have a
couple of long standing gripes here, but first...the trailer...


[Fade out.  Massive explosion, followed by a series of
quick shots:  Crescens attacking the Alpha Weltall;
Elly running down a corridor, holding Fei's pendant,
followed by Citan and Bart; Fei screaming and holding
his head, falling to reveal the puffy-haired cyborg
standing behind him grinning; a determined-looking
young man in a Solaris uniform walking towards the
camera; the Red Gear with Crescens' wings on it's head
and huge claws, hovering over Shevat; Siebzehn
attacking something out of shot, then getting knocked
flat; the Alpha Weltall exploding out of the grip of
Fenrir and Renmazou; Emeralda throwing a punch that is
caught by the young man from Solaris; Id and Fei
facing each other in a feild of blackness; Elly
crying; the Yggdrasil crashing into a forest; another
shot of the Red Gear with the extras; close-up of the
cyborg smiling madly; Fei's pendant spinning slowly;
Elly sparring with Fei; Emeralda and the youth from
Solaris laughing; Midori running to Citan with open
arms; Emeralda looking up at the sky, joined by Elly
on her right; the Solarian youth polishing a katana;
Bart, Sigurd and Jessie laughing in the Gun Room;
Billy praying as Elly walks into the room; Maria
crying; the side of the Yggdrasil exploding as the
Alpha Weltall leaves from the hole; the cyborg
grabbing Fei by the throat; Fenrir cleaving a Gear in
half, then getting shoulder-rushed; Regrs launching
mean-looking Aerods; Elly setting her jaw; Billy and
Maria exchanging looks as something blows up behind
them; Emeralda screaming as she cries, running towards
the camera; the Solarian youth looking up at the Alpha
Weltall; Fei's face fading into Id's...]


You could try breaking this up into sections, I had troube following it.

Now to the gripes:

You said this fic was based on events in Amber Michelle's "Shadows Falling"
fanfic series, correct.  If so:

1> Does she know about it?  She had a long standing (and *very* justified)
gripe against people who steal her stuff.  It's happened before with her
fanart.

2> Are you using the right version of "Shadows Falling"?  Amber Michelle
has the updated version on her website "Guardian Angels" at
http://guardian.xenogias.com  You might want to check there.

Other than that, it's been a great story so far.  Keep it up!

Brian Yaple
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