There's only two things to say about this fic.
1) Switch series. NOW. Take this idea and rewrite it
for Dominion, or Ghost in the Shell, or some other
military series.
or
2) Read a lot more Ranma and see why this fic can't
possibly happen in that universe. The Ranmaverse
functions by 1960 Western comicbook rules, you see.
Nobody dies, villains don't *need* reasons, stupid,
cheesy or corny attacks are de rigeur and war doesn't
happen, pal.
The fic was well-written, with grammar, spelling and
style all correct. It made it a real shame that it was
all so OOC that I felt I was watching the Furinkan
High school play. Please work on this; I would like to
see your work succeed - perhaps on a series you're
more familiar with?
Raye
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Some people just get paid.
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