Tobimaro@aol.com wrote:
Another episode of 'I Dream of Ranma.' I'm not going to say that this is my
favorite fanfic, but I do like it. I just have a few comments.
Fire away! :)
What good would telling the truth do? *Yes, Doctor, I'm afraid
this patient seems to be suffering from acute lovesickness, coupled with
terminal stupidity.* A psychomatic illness, really.
Maybe 'psychosomatic'.
Oops.
Never mind that Ranma was such an idiot that he'd inevitably
screw up any wish she made. Never mind that she'd be stealing from her
*sister* -- the sister who probably probably deserved it less than any
other person in the world.
One too many 'probably'.
Double oops. Will correct.
Nabiki nodded, and took her hand off the phone. "My cousin Ranko
will be happy to go with us," she said, returning to her airhead
schoolgirl voice. "Oh, I'm so excited! See you soon, Mr. Mendo."
Quoting Kasumi, "Oh my!" Just what are we getting into. ^_-
Deep doo-doo. :)
Naaaah. Of course it couldn't. How did such a silly thought get
into his head? It was probably Lum, sending him messages from space.
Fortunately, she wouldn't be back to Earth for another couple of weeks.
You know, maybe Ataru just might learn a lesson here. Naah.
Not the one he needs to learn, anyhow. :)
An inner voice scolded Akane. *Next time you use your genie, I
expect you to do it in a responsible manner, young lady.* When she was a
child, teachers used to lecture her like that about fighting. She'd
thought that once she was older, no one would talk to her like that
anymore. Boy, had she been wrong.
Gee, someone in the Ranma universe actually learning a lesson. But then
again, I'll take seven days in the betting pool on how long the lesson lasts.
Not easy to learn a lesson, is it....
"Oh, don't worry." She chuckled. "I won't wish for anything
bad."
Um, is this the "Famous Last Words" statement? Just wondering.
AKANE: In fact, that's my wish! To never again wish for anything bad!
RANMA: Oh my gods! Akane, watch out for that sixteen ton wei--
(Nahhhh... too melodramatic.)
All in all, another fine episode. Just the two problems at the start of this
post.
Thanks for the feedback!
Gary Kleppe
http://www.execpc.com/~kleppe/comics.html