Jed--
I enjoyed the story from the beginning...and it is even better now in the
rewrite.
I am especially glaad that you expanded on Ranma's concerns. Its good to see
that he is thinking this through--and we get to seee that thought process.
You might want to even expand more on that subject. IMO, I think Ranma would
hem-haw over being a girl for that long a little more. Does he still feel
uncomfortable about the curse? Has he accepted it so he can deal being in
the body for the nine months? It will be an interesting chapter on food
cravings and raging mood swings.
I am also looking forward to seeing Akane being the harried 'husband' later
on in the pregnancy. Otherwise, great story!!
Ja Ne!
Gie
"It's because I'm short, I know." --Davy Jones