From: "D.F. Roeder" <dfroeder@flash.net>
> Heart of the Immortal
Oh, good. I was hoping to see more of this soon.
You and me both. ^^;
> Chapter 3: A Damaged Past
> -------------------------
>
> Ranma silently ate the soba noodles Aya had prepared for him and a
feeling
> of d�j�
I'm wondering how well the accent grave and acute translated to
everybody.
Heh. Gotta love Word 2K. Didn't even notice that.
>
> "Do you like the noodles?" She asked.
Ouch!
Ranma: Um, they're a little *cold*...
Aya: I hadn't noticed.
:P
Revenge being a dish and all... :)
>
> Ranma jumped across the table and. . . .
Hmmm. Aya's actions seem a little unprepared. The severity of
feeding Ranma bloodworms, sticking a tanto into her gut, and then
condemning him seems really over the top. Will we be seeing more
explanation of her motivations?
This will be explained. With every chapter, I ask more questions than a
answer, but that's just the way this is flowing right now...
> A while later, Akane entered the dojo, yawning sleepily. (I'm not
ever
> going to get used to waking up this early.)
Heh! "But I'm a martial artist, too!" :)
Indeed. ^^
>
> Ranma was certainly a master; and however much he may deny it,
Akane knew
> that he was close to her in age. To accomplish so much at such a
young age.
> . . Akane wanted that, she realized. She wanted it more than
anything else.
I don't know why, but I always find these scenes of personal-goal
epiphany, if you will, very satisfying when Akane has them. She
doesn't understand her own feelings, desires, and personal goals
well enough to always see what needs be done to meet them, so it's
nice when she does.
It's a difficult thing to write, especially when you're influenced more by
the anime than the manga.
>
> "N-No. . . I really don't have the time. . ."
>
> "Heh. Alright,
NOOOO!!!! All right,
All right. :)
>
> "What?" Ranma looked down to see a little red laser point holding
steady
> near his heart. "Oh shit." He managed to push Akane out of the
way as his
> chest exploded in pain. His body jolted back against the door of
the clinic
> and he slumped to the ground.
O_o. Whoa! That really came out of nowhere, ruining my WAFFy
feelings. :)
I was in the middle of writing that scene and stream on consciousness struck
me. Wasn't even considering the Crying Freeman thing at this point.
> "K-K-Kasumi? Er. . . well. . ."
>
> "What happened? Why aren't you on the ground dying?"
>
> Ranma glanced at Akane. "No need to sound so disappointed."
Ouch!
He's an old man. A bit more sarcastic, bitter, and cynical.
>
> Umashi Ojimi was a rotund little man who spent most of his days
and nights
> in his little office building in Tokyo. He also controlled the
most
> influential and successful underground information network in all
of Asia.
> His clientele included politicians, yakuza, police, military,
businessmen,
> and just about anyone else who needed, and could afford to pay
for,
> information. If it was worth knowing, Umashi knew it. . . or, at
the very
> least, he could find it. From his little office he had access to
the
> fastest computers, the smartest people, and, of course, the most
affluent
> clientele.
Everything Nabiki wants and doesn't have yet. Kind of an ominous,
foreshadowing a possible future for Nabsy.
*grin* Would be fun if Umashi and Nabs met, huh?
> "What 'little adventure'?"
>
> "The warehouse you torched and leveled?"
>
> "Oh, you mean during my fight with the American. . . Terry
Bogard."
O_o Casual reference or a future, full-blown crossover?
At this point, unknown.
> Chinese mafia; the 108 dragons,
> to be specific.
HEH! Crossoever element #2. I've always liked Crying Freeman, even
if it is rather bizarre. OH! It was Freeman who tried to kill Ranma!
NE? NE?
*grin* I'm just gonna keep on using whatever I need to make this fun.
Heh, cool. Is this tale going to be one long series of cameo
crossovers while spinning Ranma's tale and involvement with the
Tendou daughters?
Hmmm... apt description! ^_^ Really, I just don't know. Other than the
some of the main plot points that I wish to address later on, I'm just
writing this thing with out a plan.
>
> Oh, and Happosai, Taro, and Amazons! Oh my!
Yeah, what about Happi?! Has Ranma essentially taken Happi's place
as the creator of Musabetsu Kakutou?
Nope. Happi was just... indisposed for a few years. But things change.
Thanks for the damn fast C&C, Dave! I appreciate it.
Later,
Anand
Anand Rao
jouve25@hotmail.com
http://www.gsm.uci.edu/~arao02/
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