just a couple of problem here...

"class" the teacher began " this is our new student recently >transferred
from...
well that's not important. Miss please introduce yourelf."

???? rather pointless, id you mean it to be ominus??

"My name's Miko Ukagi and i am from most recently Tokyo." the girl >said

Last name comes first and Nermina is a part of tokyo, so she would either give the section she's from or parhapse the school.

see Miko holding the mallet steady with her two fingers, and with a sudden
flick of her hand
made the mallet careening off to the bushes.

<snip>

Frustrated and confused Akane lashed out and accidentaly hit her >mallet
sending it straight into
one of the students watching them. Akane heard the sickening sound of
CRACK! as the mallet hit an
arm then everything was black.

this doesn't make sense, if Miko sent the mallet off into the bushes then how did akane hit the student, or for that matter why did her strike hit the student and then cause Akane to pass out??

you might want to elaberate this chapter more since everything is going a little to fast to make sense...


                                                -Trikster



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