From: "Greg Housley" <coldmatrix@hotmail.com>
To: ffml@fanfic.com
Subject: [FFML] [Ranma1/2]chapter 1 Treasure Hunter
Date: Sun, 02 Jan 2000 03:51:43 CST

My writing sucks crap so I figured I'd just forego pre-readers and post it for annihilation on the FFML.

I didn't find it so bad. Maybe add onto the story more setting and adjectives. You know, fill up some space between sentences.

Like: turn "She did this even though she didn't want to. Then, she went to do that." into "She looked annoyed, but she did it with plans on revenge. After she was done, she trudged on to do her next task."
I think some English teacher of mine called the process, 'showing, not telling."

However, I still liked it, and I want to be able to continue reading it.

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