Howdy,
I've found this to be a very entertaining series, though it sometimes gets
a little confusing. I think it might help to have a 'scorecard' listing
who's related to how and who's having a relationship with whom. Just an
idea.
I like the characterizations in the piece too. Everyone seems to be
maturing very nicely.
One little nitpick about this chapter. When Nodoka renounces the sepuku
contract, she 'breaks' the sword in two, or she shatters it in several
pieces. You don't shatter something in two.
Other than that, this chapter was very good, and the series as a whole has
been excellent. Keep up the good work.
C-Ya ='P
Jon Osborne
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jco005@worldinter.net
JCOsborne@kansascity.com
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Great Moments in Spellcasting History:
"Klaatu! Verrata! Ni*cough**cough*"
-Ash, Housewares from _Army of Darkness_
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Heh, a little Y2K humor in classic poetry:
This is how the world ends
This is how the world ends
This is how the world ends
Not with a bang, but a whimper.
-T.S. Elliot
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