Chapter 6
At eleven twenty the next afternoon, Juuban middle school was in the
middle of class. Students were studying,
Now here the credibility of this fic just leaves. I mean students taking
the time to 'study' in school? I doubt that very much.
teachers were teaching, the
cleaning staff was cleaning. And the tall, dark, and sinister men were
converging in some haste.
Ami was happy. All her
of her
friends had gotten better and were all
I'd drop this 'all' since you have it earlier in the sentence.
to go to school. She hated that.
Makoto was allowing her mind to wander. The teacher was reviewing
material hat she understood fairly well, and now she was thinking back.
The stranger who had saved them from that evil man. He looked so much
like her old sempai.
An eraser impacted with her head.
Heh
Alright, so he looked nothing like her old sempai and was around
twenty.
You know, I think this is the first time I've ever seen anyone had her
admit it's not that he looks like her old 'sempai' and that she's really
just turned on by the guy.
He still was good looking and she knew he was interested in her.
Another eraser impacted with her forehead, this one leaving a chalk
print.
hehehehe
"Yes Sensei,"
Yes, Sensei
Makoto sighed and did the instructed job.
sounds awkward. Just say something like 'did as she was told'
The doors opened and it stepped through. It's
Its
steps were measured and
placed with care as only a computer can do.
could do
The clothing it wore was
different than it's
its
previous set, liberated from a tourist.
I can just picture him wearing a loud tropical island style shirt with ugly
bermuda shorts. ^_^
As it moved
down the hall, armory relocated to a duffel bag under it's
Repeat after me. 'its'
left arm, it
observed those also present.
A stream of binary flowed, detailing there were three individuals
standing in front of the door to the right. Two appeared to be
administrators and the third was of an indeterminable identity.
Photographic reconnaissance of her was blocked by the head of man before
her.
So the T-101 used a gun to make a hole in the head of the man blocking his
view.
It was not important though. A 99.7% match of Target 2 was in the
building and it continued to move forward.
To Makoto, the steps seemed to reverberate through out
throughout
The principal took a step forward and placed himself only a few inches
>from her face and placed his hands on her shoulders. All of the
'a' instead of 'the'
> "You look like you need to visit the nurse. Why don't you go see her
now."
now?
The principal suggested. He considered himself a strict
disciplinarian
But he's not in a league with Gompachi Chabane. Sorry.
but he was not heartless.
She looked at him for a sec,
second
As Makoto Kino raced through the halls, she thought quickly. Why would
he be here? What reason did he have?
Did he really look like her sempai?
Sitting in the front row, Ami felt her bag buzz slightly. Concealing
her gesture behind apparently reaching
'gesture by reaching' works just fine IMO.
for more paper, she touched her
communicator. She say she had a message.
It said she had a message.
"Yes, Miss Mizuno?" The teacher recognized her.
If she's been in the class all year, I would assume she would recognize
her. (Might want to go with a different word there)
"May I be excused for a moment.
moment?
> "Certainly. Take the hall pass. Now, there are the Lorenz equations
and-" The teacher resumed her droning speech.
Rising she
Rising,
made her way to the door, stopping only to acquire the hall
pass from the teacher's desk. She paused for a moment as she was
leaving. She had not yet studied this part of the text book and hoped
this would not take long.
Moments later in an empty bathroom, she answered the call,
Ami: *FLUSH* Ah. That felt good
Oh, you didn't mean that kind of call, eh?
weight.
"Excuse me. Is Ami Mizuno here?" He had the hint of a southern accent
then it should be 'heah' instead of 'here' ^_^
"No!" The teach
teacher
screamed and threw herself into the man. His first shot
went wild as she pushed his aim off. He swung his left arm then, the one
she was shoving, and carried her away with it. Her body impacted with a
load bearing column, and it snapped in half.
Durable teacher.
Upon hearing the shot behind her, threw
Ami threw
She stopped in the doorway to the stairs, eyes widening as she abruptly
froze. That man strode before her. He was dressed all in black, from the
boots to the trenchcoat. Dark glasses hid his eyes but she recognized
him. He was the one who had saved her earlier but what was he doing-
"MOVE!" He yelled and tackled her. A flurry of small ordinance fire
occurred,
choose a different word than 'occurred' Nothing comes to mind right now.
But there has to be something better.
and the space she had just occupied was filled with bullets.
She lay on her back, the large man on top of her, and then her brain
began to work again. As he looked over his shoulder, she brought her
mind to focus. Time to take action. And this wasn't nearly as romantic
as she had thought this position would be.
It's ad lib time:
Especially since having his <noun> in her <noun> was proving very
uncomfortable.
bottom, Cyanide kicked an emergency exit open and began to run towards
the street, Ami in tow. They were at the gate before she was able to
force him to stop for a moment.
"What about the others?" She asked.
"There are others at this school!?"
I think it usually goes '?!'
"Fuck me in the goat ass!"
Leads an interesting life, he does.
The interesting thing about bullet wholes
holes
is that they don't go away.
While this isn't that interesting, admittedly, it is something often
forgot about. Thus one black van, driving down main street, looked like
there was a disco party inside as rays of light that covered the entire
rainbow emanated from within.
Now that paints a nasty picture. ^_^
"Great. I'm getting a porn show from a bunch of thirteen year olds in
the back of my van."
Hey! There are people that would pay good money for that.
Cyanide was not as appreciative an audience as
could be hoped for.
Moon looked at Jupiter and Mercury. "We need the others."
"Right. I'll call them. We can all meet in here then decide what to
do." Mercury replied, retrieving her
"Try ducking! Ya morons!"
Heh
"Anyone back there know how to drive?"
"No."
"Sorry."
"I'm fourteen. Of course not."
"Time to learn! Someone get up here." Cyanide appeared to have his mood
moving quite steadily down. Right now it seemed to be in the "Ready to
kill something, anything" phase.
Heh
Nice work. More typos than usual, though
D.B. Sommer