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From: DB Sommer <sommer@3rdm.net>
To: KaraOhki <karaohki@snet.net>
Cc: <ffml@fanfic.com>
Sent: Tuesday, December 07, 1999 5:00 PM
Subject: Re: [FFML] [fanfic][Tenchi][The Intruder]
Just to prove that I'm not dead:
I know you're not dead...I talk to you all the time!
The Intruder
A Tenchi Muyo fanfic by June "KaraOhki" Geraci
Tenchi Muyo doesn't belong to me. Just sort of borrowing some of
the
characters.
Which Tenchi universe? (or does it matter?)
OAV
The intruder wouldn't normally go near this particular house but he
was very hungry, and something smelled good.
He got lucky. By following the lovely scent he found a sliding
door
had
door that had
Noted...thank you
been left open a crack. He squeezed his small body through the
space and into the warmth and light of the house.
The kitchen turned out to be the source of the tempting aroma.
Hmm. I can't think of anywhere in the house where a 'tempting aroma'
would
be, unless one was a fly, then the bathroom might qualify. ^_^
ewwww
The
little creature jumped up onto the counter and walked over to the
stove. He immediately recognized the danger.
Given some of the cooks in this house, it could be any dish Ryouko
or Aeka
try to make.
Extreme heat was coming
>from the area, and he couldn't get close enough to even glimpse
what
was making it salivate.
'him' instead of 'it', since you've already identified him as male.
Yep, I missed that one! Decided to make him male halfway through
writing it and missed that one when I went back.
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"What do you think you're doing? How DARE you change the channel!"
"Oh come on! How many times have you watched that stupid ballet?
Give me a break!"
Kiyone pulled a gun on Sasami. "Put that controller down, you
bitch."
Well, it would have been a change of pace from Ryouko and Aeka,
since we
already know that, since it's an argument, it's going to be them.
Ayeka grabbed the remote out of Ryoko's hand
See. ^_^
and switched the ballet
back on.
"At least it's better than that ridiculous space movie! With all
the
places you've traveled to, have you ever seen anything like that?"
I think 'never' instead of 'ever' here, but I'm not sure.
Nope, "ever" because she hasn't seen anything like it
A pair of small eyes watched as the two women fought over the
remote.
During one tussle over it, a button was pushed and a different
channel
was set. Peace instantly prevailed. Both women were mesmerized by
what was on the screen.
"I didn't know Casablanca was on!"
Heh. Never seen it myself, but from the women I know, it's always a
good
choice.
You WHAT???? *tosses a copy of the movie at you* Watch it NOW, and
give me a report in the morning.
Honestly, how can you deprive yourself like that?
"EEK!!!!!"
"A MOUSE!!!"
"Chu?"
Wahhhh! Not Chu-Chu! Anything but that! (Maybe Ryo-Ohki can eat
him.)
No! It's just an ordinary little field mouse. Not Chu-Chu, not
Pikachu, just a MOUSE.
"Now THIS is more like it." She reached into nothingness, and
pulled
out a few cubes of cheese.
"Eat these, dear. Full of nutrition, and quite delicious. You'll
get
a lot of energy out of this cheese."
Heh
Two others in the house had also been napping. The sounds of
fighting
were too common to wake them. The sound of someone crashing
through a
wall didn't even faze them. However, the scent of something that
didn't belong was enough to wake the smaller of the pair. She sat
up,
sniffed the air, and started downstairs.
There was definitely an intruder in the house.
Hence, the title of the fic.
Ryo-Oh-Ki
Yay! Go Ryo-Oh-Ki.
Ryo-Oh-Ki had finally succeeded in cornering the mouse, but
Sasami's
voice distracted her and it got away. For reasons it didn't
understand, it ran straight to Sasami and jumped onto her shoulder.
"Chu! Chu!"
"Oh, you're so CUTE!"
And then the mouse dug its fangs into Sasami's throat, ripping it
out.
*slaps you with a slice of cheese*
The quivering mouse allowed Ryo-Oh-Ki to sniff him, fully expecting
to
be devoured. Instead, the cabbit sat back and tilted her head at
him.
"Miyah!"
Boo. I wanted to see 'Ryo-Oh-Ki, Mouser at Large'
Maybe you could write that one?
Tenchi returned from a visit to his aunt, and found Sasami in front
of
the television with Ryo-Oh-Ki and a mouse in her lap. He started
to
talk to her, but she shushed him. A glance at the screen told him
why. Never, ever talk to Sasami when Brian Boitano is skating.
Hehehehehe. Her anger would be greater than that of Ryouko and Aeka
combined.
"Oh no! What shall we do?" asked Mihoshi.
Tenchi thought fast. Really fast.
"It's going to take me some time to catch it, girls. Why don't you
spend the night with Grandpa? I'm sure he won't mind."
No. The letch probably wouldn't. (Since there's no Kiyone mentioned,
I
assume it's the OVA universe)
"But, but!" protested Ryoko.
"Look, that thing is fast! You don't want to find it in your bed,
do
you?"
Heh. Good move on Tenchi's part.
Cute little one hour work. Now do the next part of CoS. ^_^
I will, as soon as I finish the next part of "Cinders", which is up to
fifteen pages
Thanks, DB. That was fun!
June
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