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Subject:
[FFML] [EVA][Fanfic] HERZ Part 9: They that Overcometh/I Will
Date:
Thu, 18 Nov 1999 15:50:14 +0000
From:
Toh Ee Loong <teloong@cwcom.net>
Description: Kaji reappears, Misato has an attack of the
guilts, and Shinji acts kind of like his old man.
Comments:
obliterated. The Army of God. She had given no quarter and made sure
their leader meet a bloodcurling end. Blackmailing the Chinese and
"bloodcurdling", and you said you were going to change
that bit.
earnestly. Having confessed her sins, she sought absolution in the man
she had had to betray.
"had been forced to betray"
I shall have to see how this climax goes.
Subject:
[FFML] [Slayers][Wierdness][NON-LEMON] Slayers Wet
Date:
Sat, 20 Nov 1999 07:37:53 -0800 (PST)
From:
Valandar TheRed <valandar_the_red@yahoo.com>
Description: Lina and company meet the Jyusenkyo Springs.
Comments: The ironic thing is that by any reasonable
standard, Lina already has a perfectly respectable set,
not much smaller than Ranma's.
Subject:
[FFML] [slayers] Slayers Demiurge, book four: Survival
Date:
Fri, 19 Nov 1999 21:50:09 -0800 (PST)
From:
twoflowr@maison-otaku.net (Twoflower)
Description: Lina meets her arch-nemesis. Many people
die, but they are bandits so no biggie.
Comments: Gourry entering the fray has some interesting
potential. After all, the Lina demi-urge has a lot more
in common with the girl Gourry fell in love with and
married than does his wife.
Subject:
[FFML] [fanfic][Ranma] Flesh and Blood, pt. 1: Children of Magic
Date:
Tue, 16 Nov 1999 21:06:36 -0600
From:
Nicholas Leifker <nightelf@thekeep.org>
Description: 2nd generation story in which Kuno's son
gets carried away with the old rivalry, leading to serious
consequences. Meanwhile Jyusenkyo "wakes up" and begins
to summon those who bear its mark.
Comments: My major problem with this story is the knee-jerk
no mercy for rapists reaction that is deeply ingrained in
me. Shutarou had better get used to being a girl because
he's getting off lightly with that.
Subject:
[FFML] [fanfic] Ronin Summer : Shell Games 4
Date:
Tue, 16 Nov 1999 19:31:59 PST
From:
"Morgan Hudson" <dataraven_659@excite.com>
Description: The real villain, being a typical villainous
idiot, talks too much.
Comments: Coming along nicely.
Akane examined he older sister closely and saw that she was very nervous
and kept glancing between Ranma and her left hand. The slight paranoia she
had about the ring kicked in at full force.
"her older sister"
Subject:
[FFML] [Shortfic][Rurouni Kenshin] Promise
Date:
Mon, 15 Nov 1999 05:07:15 -0800 (PST)
From:
Raye Johnsen <raye_j@yahoo.com>
Description: A brief slice of Kenshin's life.
Comments: I've seen a lot of WAFF fics that left me feeling
nothing except mildly ill. This wasn't one of them.
Subject:
[FFML] [Fanfic][SMoon alt. universe]Bishoujou Senshi Sailor
Gemini - Chapter
One - Callings
Date:
Sun, 14 Nov 1999 23:19:06 -0600
From:
"Douglas A. Reeves" <stormwalker@airmail.net
Description: Sort of an otaku-fic with anime fans getting
the chance to become Sailor knockoffs.
Comments: Considering that this is inspired by some kind
of Storyteller system net supplement, does that mean the
senshi knockoffs will run into fomori, vampires and
werewolves?
Subject:
[FFML] [FFML][Fanfic][Ranma/SM]Moon Martial Marital Melee
chapter 2
Date:
Sun, 14 Nov 1999 17:08:43 -0800 (PST)
From:
Video Game Addicted Person <vg_ap@yahoo.com>
Description: Ranma is raised as Usagi's adopted brother.
Subject:
[FFML] [FIC][ALT. UNIV][R.5] Jet Moto Chapter Eight
Date:
Sun, 14 Nov 1999 22:23:19 -0500 (EST)
From:
Jed M Bidwell <Jedediah@tri-countynet.net>
Description: Cyberpunk Ranma universe revolving around
racing rather than martial arts.
Comments: Things are getting interesting.
Akane knew deep inside that if she hand't lost to him, her reception would
have been vastly different. She would have met him with a warm hug instead
"hadn't"
She liked him right from the start, the enternally tousled hair, intense
eyes, and his muscular build. But mostly she felt safe with him, something
"eternally"
take a genuis to realize that she was going for a weapon, and the time to
strike was now.
"genius"
Shan Pu glared at Ukyo through slitted eyes, her anger residing gradually
as she breathed deeply. Ukyo was a decent scapper, Shan Pu would give her
scrapper
Subject:
[FFML] [Fanfic[Ranma]Omiai
Date:
Sat, 13 Nov 1999 13:22:47 -0500
From:
"Jan Story" <janstory@mailhost.det.ameritech.net>
Description: What if Ranma had met Akane right after her
mother's death.
Comments: This one needs to be expanded, to show the
ramifications of the change, I think.
Subject:
[FFML] [one shot] [eva] Cold (revised)
Date:
Mon, 22 Nov 1999 02:24:29 -0500 (EST)
From:
Dreiser1@ix.netcom.com
Description: Rei and Asuka get naked.
Comments: I like it. Sort of Spock and McCoy with
sex changes and subtext.
Subject:
[FFML] [EVA][Fanfic] HERZ Part 10: The Book of Life/Memories II
Date:
Thu, 25 Nov 1999 00:03:13 +0000
From:
Toh Ee Loong <teloong@cwcom.net>
Description: Shinji gets to be tortured and many flashbacks
reveal how the End of Evangelion was averted.
Comments:
"Ohohoho! Of course, how careless of me! The mutual exchange of
viriginity! Pity you were taking advantage of him while he was drunk
"virginity"
Kurumi led Shinji to wear Gendou had been held. Shinji saw the
wounds his father had sustained. He turned to Kurumi and before he
could ask, she answered his question by shaking her head.
"where"
Subject:
[FFML] [R1/2] Dream Eater, Pt. 1
Date:
Wed, 24 Nov 1999 15:57:55 -0700
From:
Krista Perry <kperry@aros.net>
Description: Sort of like Hearts of Ice, only Ranma gets
kidnapped by supernatural forces and Akane sets out in
pursuit, rather than vice versa.
Comments:
Subject:
[FFML] [Fanfic] [Sm] Children of Light & Thunder, Ch.2
Date:
Tue, 23 Nov 1999 2
From:
ILadyIce@aol.com
Description: Our hero/villains do the old transfer student
routine. Haven't the senshi figured that one out yet?
Comments: It's curious that the anti-heroine immediately
recognises Sailor Mercury in her civilian I.D. Particularly
since, being an alien, how would she recognised the Mercury
symbol? In any case, the author may be dissatisfied with
this chapter, but somehow I like it better than the first.
It caught my attention.
Subject:
[FFML] [fic][Ranma][NEW] Shampoo 1/2 Lost Chapter 1: De Laws of
Discipline
Date:
Tue, 23 Nov 1999 23:05:32 -0500
From:
"DB Sommer" <sommer@3rdm.net>
Description: DB Sommer reveals that Shampoo 1/2 could have
been even longer.
Comments: This Ultimate Teacher crossover is a nice and
silly isolated episode.
Subject:
[FFML] [Ranma] Girl days part 15
Date:
Tue, 23 Nov 1999 19:17:25 EST
From:
Kenjiko2@aol.com
Description: Happosai summons a demon the wrong way, for
the right reason.
Comments:
style did matter when it came to skirts and shoes. In fact, it was
something that was driving her father up the wall (again). Much to
Ranma's amusement and ill-concealed satisfaction.
Sentence fragment.
The description of the Kuno family history of heroic idiocy
is particularly clever. I may steal some of it someday.
I've got this idea about Nabiki discovering a temporal
portal back to Japan in 1944...
However, one notes that in reality, Principal Kuno's
looniness had little in particular to do with the outcome
of events on Friday. After all, how could he know that
demons aren't allowed to tamper with school uniforms, or
that the female populace of Furinkan would interpret
"casual" to mean ball gowns and bunny suits?
Subject:
[FFML] [GW][xover]Family ch.4
Date:
Thu, 25 Nov 1999 12:13:08 EST
From:
Alan178@aol.com
Description: Now that Duo is dead, what are his career
plans?
Comments: Duo's father and mother are both ferry-girls?
Subject:
[FFML] [FanFic][Ranma] Spreading Wings Scenes 43&44
Date:
Thu, 25 Nov 1999 08:00:52 -0600
From:
Don Granberry <lunohoco@lunohoco.com>
Description: Nabiki continues to flirt with Westerlake
as another Yakuza meets a grisly end.
Comments:
Westerlake, with the motely and now rapidly tiring crew of working
stiffs still pounding along behind him, did not take the right fork. Nor
"motly"
>from his left arm and another from his right foot. Serves you right, you
big cheater! She thought at him.
I'd suggest deleting "She thought at him"
What's a donka?
The slapstick torturous ends of Yakuza are getting old.
We get the idea. Move on.
Subject:
[FFML] [Ranma][Fanfic][Repost] Returning Home part 7
Date:
Thu, 25 Nov 1999 23:52:59 +1300
From:
David Farr <djfarr@ihug.co.nz>
Description: Ryoga and Genma lose the option of hiding.
Comments:
Ranma shrugged and started guiding his father back to the others.
"He may be a great martial art, but his people skills leave a lot to be
desired."
"artist"
Subject:
[FFML] [fanfic] [Lupin III] Exploits of Lupin III Part 1
Date:
Tue, 23 Nov 1999 17:38:29 -0500
From:
"Osborne,Bruce" <saitoh-hajime@neo.rr.com>
Description: Lupin III written with hefty dollops of
melodrama and soap operatic love triangels.
Comments: I understand that you are trying to avoid the
comedy elements of the original. But really, Lupin should
be a thief, not a murderer. Personally shooting Zenigata
strikes me as over the line. This isn't a "correct
characterisation" issue. I just don't care about this
Lupin enough to want to read more.
Subject:
[FFML] [Gunsmith Cats][Spamfic] 5MT Presents GSC Ch 0.1
Date:
Thu, 25 Nov 1999 13:04:09 -0000
From:
Sam Brown <SBrown@uk.infogrames.com>
Description: Retelling of the first GSC tape with great
mockery.
Comments: Darn, couldn't you have done the third one?
I want to find out how it turned out. Medium funny.
Subject:
[FFML] [FFML][fanfic][Ranma][draft]An Awakening of Demons
Chapter 5
Date:
Thu, 25 Nov 1999 22:54:57 +1100
From:
Phil <kagami@jeack.com.au>
Description:
Comments:
Climbing Fuji-san was a traditional lovers' past-time.
Unfortunately for the present couple attempting the
"pastime"
Victims? I'd hardly call them victims. They got away
easily enough.
Strictly speaking, I think it's about time someone pointed
out to Kodachi that she may have the option of making an
exception for Ranma since he isn't particularly malevolent,
but actually adding the bloodline of a devil to her own
line of devil hunters simply isn't on.
Subject:
[FFML] (no subject)
Date:
Thu, 25 Nov 1999 12:45:58 -0800 (PST)
From:
Troy Thomas <silentnova@go.com>
Description:
Comments: It is more effective in terms of readability
to single-space your work with paragraphs separated by
double spaces. It would also be nice if you put the
title in the subject line.
He tried his best, yet he couldn't bring himself to accept the fact he was the
one who brought his entire family to crises that was close in the future.
"the crises (crisis?) that would soon be upon them"
A-hem. Genma is fully in favour of Ranma defending the
weak and protecting their interests. Does the expression,
"It is a martial artists duty to defend the weak!" ring
a bell?
higher every time the boys found themselves in hot water if only to see Ranma
heading head first into solving the tasks puzzle.
"task's". Or just delete entirely.
His personality though is what Katsuhito enjoyed the most about him. Ranma�s
unquenchable thirst for life is what seems to allow people to forgive him time
after time after one of his mishaps occurs.
Tense confusion.
All in all, I found this chapter to be slow moving and
overly expository. Spend less time thinking and more
time doing.