I'm looking for C&C on this idea because I really like it and want to make it
as good as possible. Please be blunt.
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Standard disclaimer crap: I own none of the characters, names, or anything
else remotely
resembling something owned by Shogokukan Inc. or any other bigwig company
controlling powerful
and intimidating lawyers with a taste for human blood.
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Well, here goes. I'm just jotting down another idea that's been bouncing
around in my head. As
always, C&C is greatly appreciated. Be blunt. I know it's not the best in
the world, so don't
be afraid to tell me that.
Anyways, I'd better start now.
*****
Um, another warning, I guess. (I wrote this one after writing some of the
story)
Y'see, I didn't expect any sexual content to find its way into this story,
but it did. I don't
know if it'd qualify as lemon (at least, not yet...I hope I don't get carried
away), but I'm
warning you nonetheless. If y'all be squeamish, hyper-sexually sensitive, or
Catholic, you might
not wanna read this. Although I really do like the story, so I suggest just
skipping parts you
find inappropriate. Or not. Y'know, whatever. I can't force you to do
anything.
*****
Akane was smiling with nostalgia for last night. She sighed, and decided to
take a bath; she
smelled a little funny.
Walking to the bathroom and not seeing the 'occupied' sign, she slipped into
the changing room
and undressed. The reflection in the mirror caught her eye.
Smiling, she finished disrobing and opened the door into the bathroom.
"Good morning, Akane. I knew you'd fall for this."
Eyes opened quite wide she shouted "Ranma? You *planned* this?!?
HENTAI!!!" Lunge.
Ranma easily caught Akane's flailing arms and pulled her into the bath.
"Now, Akane, you know very well I enjoy seeing you naked. You're
beautiful, trim, fit,
and I love you."
Akane heard those words and remembered the night before. Melting into
Ranma's powerful
arms she purred "I love you too, Ranma. I'm sorry. I just got carried away
and forgot about our
recent developments."
"Akane, that's alright. I more often than not deserved it in the past,
and old habits
are hard to break."
"Ranma, do you really think I'm beautiful, or did you just say that to
get me in the
sack?"
Ranma chuckled. "Akane, you are beautiful. I know I used to always call
you uncute and
unsexy and a tomboy, but I was just trying to hurt you because you hurt me."
Akane jerked back and stared at Ranma with fire in her eyes. "I hurt
YOU? What are you
talking about? You're the one who always started the fights! Of all the
conceited, arrogant..."
Ranma's kiss forestalled any further comment. Ending it, he carressed
Akane's cheek
saying "Akane, please listen. We both promised to listen before
overreacting, remember?" After
she had nodded the affirmative, he continued. "Now Akane, remember the first
day of school after
I got here?" Again, he waited for her to nod. "Remember how you helped me
out with Kuno after
we landed in the pool? Well, when you did that, I realized that I loved you.
Kinda strange,
actually, but after knowing you for less than a week, I had fallen in love
with you. Anyways,
that night, I decided to thank you for helping me out. I went to your room,
and was about to
knock on the door when I overheard you talking - well, yelling, rather - to
Nabiki."
Akane rememberd that quite well. Ashen faced and ashamed she looked to
Ranma and softly
asked "you...heard that?"
Ranma nodded.
Akane was now starting to cry. "You mean...the whole reason you hurt me
was because I
hurt you?" Now, the tears were coming full force. "And I had the sheer
audacity to hit YOU for
it? I'm such a BAKA!" she cried before collapsing into sobs.
"Ssssssshhhhh. Akane, it's alright. What's done is done. Just know
that I do love you,
and nothing will ever change that."
"Do you really mean it, Ranma?" Akane inquired with tears and shame in
her eyes.
"Yes. Akane Tendo, I love you. I will marry you, and we will live a
happy life and have
many happy children."
Akane had stopped crying by now, and was looking to Ranma with a
suspicious air about
her. "Just HOW many children are you going to want, Ranma?"
Smiling, he kissed her forehead. "As many as you want, Akane. Although,
I do think that
if we're going to have kids, we should get some practice so we can get it
right the first time
around. As man and wife, that is."
Akane was a bit shocked at Ranma's forewardness. <Is this the man that
took 2 1/2 years
to tell me he loved me?>
"You don't want to? Fine. Just sit back and relax. I'll do all the
work." Akane was
pushed back to the edge of the tub, Ranma radiating lust and love the entire
way.
Any further thought on that topic was forestalled by the intense waves of
pleasure wracking
Akane's body.
<DAMN!!! Ranma's good for a beginner! I'll have
to...ooohhhh...oh...d...damn...>
*****
Nabiki looked on with disgust, contempt and jealousy on her face, and her
hand down her pants.
<Geez....if Akane would just...get...out of the...oooh...way, I
could...could...oh...
...my...go...go...mmmmm....GOD!!!>
She spasmed violently as she came. Panting, she removed her bra with the one
free hand. This
would normally be difficult, but she wasn't wearing a shirt and had also had
alot of practice at
it. Removing her other hand from her pants, she reached up and started
rubbing her juices all
over her breasts, moaning and gasping as her fingers brushed across her
nipples.
<I'm glad no one else knows about the camera I have in the bathroom. I
wouldn't be able
to watch Ranma then. I wouldn't be able to masturbate while watching Akane
or Kasumi, either.>
She arched her back, bringing her breasts high into the air above her bed.
<mmm...I need to get Ranma to marry me. Either that, or force daddy that
I'd be a better
choice. Well, I suppose I...oooh...could use some of Cologne's spices, but
that wouldn't be real
love, then.>
Slipping her pants and her wet panties off, she sighed (for two reasons)
Nabiki brought her right hand down to her inner thigh and started teasing
them, building up the
sexual tension.
<Ranma, I love you, but Akane needs to go. I love her too, but you
can't. Actually...>
Gasping, she brings her hand up to the junction of her legs.
<...nah. Akane wouldn't go for that. Ranma'd love it, but then so would
any other male.
They dream of having two girls at the same time.>
Hastening her pace, she brought her other hand up to her breasts and started
massaging them
again.
<That's why I think I should marry Ranma. We're alot more alike than he
and Akane are.
Not to mention Akane wouldn't want to have sex with Ranma's girl half, while
I dream about it
every other night. Heh. I wonder what Kasumi would say if she knew I was a
bisexual?>
Before she climaxes, she stops, spreading eagle on her bed.
<Aaah, who cares? I mean, I just wouldn't be me if I just gave up! I'm
gonna give Akane
a run for her money.>
Smiling, she gets up and goes over to her closet. She opens the door, moves
some shirts hanging
in there out of her way, and removes a false wall panel to reveal a safe.
She spins the dial,
putting in the combination so she may gain access to the things that are most
precious to her.
<Heh. Ranma, if I can't have you in me for real right now...>
The safe opens, and she pulls out 2 things: a little vial of clear liquid
with an eyedropper
taped to it, and a vibrator with the word 'Ranma' on it in big, red hirigana
characters.
<...then I'll have to improvise.>
She goes back to the bed, uses the eyedropper to put some of the clear liquid
under her eyelids,
and turns on the vibrator.
<Here's to seduction...>
As the LSD kicks in, she inserts 'Ranma' into herself, and proceeds to have a
VERY good trip.
*****
"mmmmmm...Ranma? Does that mean you just said you loved me to get me in
the sack?"
"Yup."
Akane giggles and thwomps Ranma with a pillow.
Ranma moves the pillow off of his face, sits up, and looks around Akane's
room in
confusion. "Akane, weren't we in the bathroom?"
Akane sits up and looks around, too. "Yeah, we were."
"So why are we in your room now?"
"Well, I think it had something to do with the fact that you tounged me
for a good 5
hours, with me orgasming every 15 minutes. With all that, I got a bit
exhausted and passed out."
Ranma smiles, then looks ashamed. "I'm sorry for making you pass out.
If I'd known that
I was going to exhaust you like that, I wouldn't have gone on for as long as
I did."
Thwomp take two. "Ranma, that pillow was for being a baka. You know
very well that I
was writhing in passion the entire time. Also, I didn't pass out just
because I was exhausted.
The pleasure overwhelmed me and my body shut down. There were just too many
pleasure signals for
my brain to handle."
Ranma tossed the pillow aside and looked to Akane, who had snuggled up
under his right
arm again. "Akane, I'm calling off the engagement."
Shame that Akane's mirror couldn't handle having a teenaged martial artist
hurled through it.
That was a nice mirror, too.
"What?!? Why? Was all that REALLY to just get me in the sack?!?" She
was torn between
being heartbroken and violated or being furious. The tears won, and she
collapsed into sobs.
"Just...get out of here, Ranma. I NEVER want to see you AGAIN!!!"
Ranma brushed the broken glass off of himself as he stood up. "God
damnit, Akane! What
is wrong with you?!? You ALWAYS jump to conclusions before you know all the
facts!"
"SHUT UP!!! YOU BASTARD!!! YOU USE ME FOR SEX AND THEN HAVE THE GALL TO
INSULT ME?!?
GET THE F..." Akane was interrupted as Ranma seized her by the shoulders and
looked into her eyes
with barely controlled anger.
"AKANE, SHUT UP!!!!!!!"
Akane had never seen Ranma this angry, and she was fairly frightened for her
life.
"Akane, I'm calling off the engagement. That DOESN'T mean, however, that
I don't want
to marry you!"
"Huh?"
"Akane, throughout our entire relationship, we've resented each other and
become jealous
because this engagement was forced upon us, and neither of us really wanted
it. We loved each
other, but weren't sure if that feeling was mutual. So when things-like
Shampoo, Kuno, Kodachi,
and Ukyo-went wrong, we would always try to hurt the other because we didn't
want to let them
know our true feelings. Well, this is how I'm going to remedy the problem:
I've already broken
the engagement, but Now I want to reinstate it."
Ranma lets go of Akane and goes over to his discarded pants. He pulls
out a little ring
box and comes back to Akane, kneeling in front of her.
"Akane Tendo, I love you. I want to marry you. I want to know that you
want to marry
me. If you say yes to the question I'm about to ask, then we'll both know
that we could have
gotten out of the engagement, but didn't. We'll know that WE chose each
other, not our fathers."
Ranma opens the box to reveal a simple ring with a single diamond in the
center of the wedding
band.
"Akane Tendo, will you marry me?"
*****
Nabiki snapped out of her trip when she heard those words.
"What the f...?" she cried as she raced over to her monitors, 'Ranma'
still in her.
Watching Akane burst into tears and throw herself into Ranma's arms didn't
help the sinking
feeling she had in her stomach, either.
"Ahh SHIT!!! This is SO not good! I'm going to have to work quickly!"
She pulls
'Ranma' out of her, shuts 'him' off, and sits in her office chair
cross-legged. She licks her
juices off of it as she ponders. <Major setback. SETBACK, not defeat,
though. Nabiki Tendo can
pull anything off. This is pretty bad, though. I'm going to have to call in
ALOT of favors to
seduce Ranma before he marries Akane.>
She gets up and puts her *things* away and rehides them.
"Oh, well. As they say: 'There's no rest for the wicked'..."
*****