All I can say is, this is good.

You seem to have a real knack for writing action sequences... not an easy thing, if
what I've seen in other fics is any indication.  You've also built a good deal of
suspense: you've told us enough to avoid frustration, but left enough to keep us
interested.  I also didn't notice any particular problems with grammar or spelling.
Oh, they might be there, but they aren't numerous or apparent enough for me to
notice or care.

I can't wait to see more.



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