Subject: [FFML] Collected Comments 5 [C&C]
From: David Johnston
Date: 11/18/1999, 5:32 PM
To: ffml@fanfic.com

A question for the FFML at large.  What are the capabilities 
of Major Kusanagi's mech?  

Subject: 
            [FFML] [FFML][Ranma][FanFic]Spreading Wings 
       Date: 
            Tue, 09 Nov 1999 01:49:17 -0600 
       From: 
            Don Granberry <lunohoco@lunohoco.com>
   Reply-To: 
            lunohoco@lunohoco.com

Description:  Nabiki proves, once again, that she is an
irresistable gaijin magnet.  

Comments:  There's a fair bit of Mary Sue about this story
but it's mechanically sound.  I liked the depiction of
Tofu at work, but I have doubts about the depiction of 
Nodoka.  I mean, c'mon, if the old man's training techniques
didn't break or embitter Ranma, what could Nodoka do?  
Also, Kasumi, being a traditional sort, would not likely 
approve of or encourage Nabiki's interest in a foreigner.
Soun would plotz.

Subject: 
        [FFML] [Ranma/Day of the Dead][crossover][Alternative Reality][DARK]
        Twilight of the Dead (Chapter 5 -- The Stage is Set) 
  Date: 
        Mon, 8 Nov 1999 22:21:20 -0600 
  From: 
        the_man_with_the_machinegun@juno.com

Description:  Human bad guys show up.  

Comments:  The spell checker is not your friend...

      Ranma ACTED like he wanted to keep everyone
there safe and alive, but when help arrived, he did
noting. It wasn't right, and it was his chance to
show Ranma for the fake that he was.

"nothing"

       "Pulling their efforts, Ranma."

"pooling"

      "He means that they are planing," Ranma
offered, looking from Natsu to Tofu. "Right?"

"planning"

      Rembrant frowned in disgust. "Are all of you
soldier-types always so vial?"

"vile"

The problem with zombies conveniently returning to normal
in my view is that they've been pretty ripped up as a 
prelude to becoming a zombie haven't they?  But of course
if it's good enough for Ghost Hunter Mikami, it's good
enough for Ranma.  

Subject: 
            [FFML] [shortfic] [SI parody?] 
       Date: 
            Mon, 08 Nov 1999 22:08:13 -0600 
       From: 
            Kichigai <kichigai@ipa.net>

Description:  Lina Inverse otaku finds that she is better
admired from a long long way away.  

Comments:  Much better than the average self insertion,
and it's short.  However the line formatting was quite
bad.  

Subject: 
        [FFML] (no subject) 
  Date: 
        Mon, 8 Nov 1999 20:49:47 -0500 
  From: 
        "Rebeka Thomas" <ranko_1_2@hotmail.com>

Description:  Ranma is plonked into the Odyssey.

Comments:  The author's habit of addressing the audience
directly is more irritating than amusing.  Also, casting
Ranma as the voice of good sense strikes me as odd.

Subject: 
         [FFML] [Ranma] A Matter of Romantic Chemistry - Part 4 
    Date: 
         Mon, 08 Nov 1999 00:00:46 -0800 
    From: 
         Jack Staik <jstaik1043@earthlink.net>

Description:  Ranma's separated cursed form turns out
to be his sister after a fashion.  

Comments:  Kasumi's attitude toward Nodoka is internally
contradictory.  That isn't necessarily a problem, but
Kasumi should be a little more aware of the conflict between
"No mother would do it" and "Honour demanded it".  

Subject: 
        [FFML] [Fanfic] [SM] [SI-almost-parody] Blue Without You - chapter 1 
  Date: 
        Tue, 9 Nov 1999 19:11:35 -0600 
  From: 
        "Kevin Callahan" <kionon@hotmail.com>

Description:  Kevin Callahan suddenly gets his very own
Ami Mizuno.

Comments:  Well, so far it isn't funny.  I'll have to wait
and see just what the "madness and chaos" is.  

Subject: 
        [FFML] [fic][Soap][revised]Cyan: Nobuyuki Muyo! 
  Date: 
        Wed, 10 Nov 1999 10:06:40 +0800 
  From: 
        TimeRunner <keiichi@i-manila.com.ph>

Description:  Not very changed from the last time so far
as I can tell.  

Comments:  

Nobuyuki:  So you made me think you were going to kill
me to cheer me up?

Ryoko:  Yup!  Worked too.  Don't you feel a lot more
cheerful now that you aren't going to be killed?  

Subject: 
        [FFML] [fic][Soap][revised]Yellow: All-Purpose Cultural Mecha Boy Ryu-Kun 
  Date: 
        Wed, 10 Nov 1999 10:07:47 +0800 
  From: 
        TimeRunner <keiichi@i-manila.com.ph>

Description:  Also apparently unchanged.

Comments:  Kiyone's motivation is still cloudy as written.
>From what you told me she doesn't have the corporate 
loyalty that she expresses in this, but rather a personal
loyalty.

Subject: 
         [FFML] [Fanfic][X-over] An Unlikely Couple (Chapter 2) 
    Date: 
         Wed, 10 Nov 1999 00:17:39 -0600 
    From: 
         Kent Hyam <rodney.hyam@sk.sympatico.ca>

Description:  Various Ranma 1/2 martial artists out of 
ego or lovesickness decide that they have to help the 
Senshi.  

Comments:  Some sloppiness produced by haste and lack of
pre-reading.  

    Minako was about to continue, but subsided when she caught sight of
the expression on Michiru's face.  "We don't no that she had anything al
all to do with the Silver Millennium," Ami commented calmly.

"know" "at".  And may I take this moment to sincerely hope
that they don't turn out to be reincarnations.  There's no
reason why our era can't turn out some tough customers.  
Also that should probably be the look on Haruka's face,
since it's Haruka feeling the pangs of jealousy, isn't it?

   "As I recall, each of the Senshi headed a group of elite warriors
that aided them in their duties."  After she finished, Luna smiled
smugly, happy show Artemis up.

"to show"  And how did that show Artemis up?  

    "Right.  Plus, there was a dojo near the last attack.  It's the
article beside the add that's the real proof though."

"ad"

And that crack about martial artists not spending their
time doing tea ceremony or eating was funny.  

You know if Argentite just reasons with Taro, he could
be a real asset.  He has toyed with the thought of taking
over the world after all, and it would be his chance to
rename himself after a mineral.  

Subject: 
         [FFML] [Pok�mon] POK�GENIE Ch 10 
    Date: 
         Tue, 16 Nov 1999 23:51:19 GMT 
    From: 
         "Tom Mathews a.k.a. Disruptor" <godphoniex@hotmail.com>\

Description:  The weather turns dangerously bad, just as
Ash decides to limit his array of pokemon.

Comments:  I'd think that Misty's wish ability would limit
the amount of real danger they are in.  So when is Misty
going to win a fight by having Ash wish for a large anvil
above her opponent's head?

       Bill, wincing, said, "Professor, don't you think that show is in bad
tatse?"

"taste"

  Under the waves, Team Rocket's sub was being rocked by the storm as well.

Uh...no.  A surface storm doesn't endanger submerged subs.

       Ash shrugged, as he was a bit startled to her anything coming from
Charizard.  He hoped that the time out of the ball would make Charizard more

"hear"

It appears that Misty is no longer worried about the idea
of evolving into an efreet.  When will she start saying
"Gee-ni-ee"?

Subject: 
        [FFML] [Fanfic][TM!] Vacation Days chapter 5 
  Date: 
        Thu, 18 Nov 1999 01:42:34 -0500 
  From: 
        "DB Sommer" <sommer@3rdm.net>

Description:  Mihoshi demonstrates that she really is a 
better person to be shipwrecked with than Gilligan.  

Comments:  Actually mammalian herbivores and carnivores
taste like beef.  Mammalian omnivores 
(including humans) tend to taste like pork.  Reptiles and birds 
taste like chicken.  Giant arthropods would taste like 
crayfish.  

"I, ah, I didn't mean you," Tenchi said as lamely as possible.

The tone of his lie made Mihoshi look at him curiously. "Are you hearing

But Tenchi didn't lie.  

"Oops," Mihoshi said as she realized what she had done. She handed the
laser wire back to Tenchi. "It's a good thing they pack spares rods."

"spare rods"

victory would be Malgaunt's. "She's the best flyer among us, and we really
need you here to make keep giving orders to the others." He hoped Stargrave

delete "make"

"I didn't bother me at all," she finally managed to get out.

"It"

"I'm not gay!" Tenchi shouted.

"I didn't say you are," Mihoshi said in surprise at the uncalled for
accusation. "I didn't think it either. I just assumed you were being a

That's a protestation, not an accusation.  

Subject: 
        [FFML] [FFML][Slayers][character sketch][WAFF alert] One Day 
  Date: 
        Wed, 17 Nov 1999 21:30:48 -0800 
  From: 
        Murasaki Kaze <muteki@juno.com>

Description: Two people try to get up the nerve to confess
their affections.

Comments:  Not as WAFFY as it seems, more ironic I'd say.  
Some sloppy formatting.

Subject: 
        [FFML] [FIC][R.5] The Omega Project Part One, 1 of 2 
  Date: 
        Wed, 17 Nov 1999 22:27:20 -0500 (EST) 
  From: 
        Jed M Bidwell <Jedediah@tri-countynet.net>

Description:  A clone of Ranma's female form wakes up in
a dark future.

Comments:  While Ranma's breasts are substantial, at least
by Japanese standards, they aren't _that_ big.  Have the 
clones been tinkered with?  I should think the reason why 
she was enjoying trashing the would-be rapists would be
self-evident even if the source of the ability to do so is
a mystery to her.  This is vaguely reminiscent of a certain
other Ranma project with many authors, but since that one
has gone down the tubes, I look forward to seeing more
of this one.



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