<Claps loudly>
Good job! In my eyes, you've really managed to capture the feel of the series,
and stick with it. With all the dark and uber-serious Ranma fics out there,
it's good to read something funny. The fact that it is largely in the style of
the original series is a major plus.
I have to say, I almost stopped reading it in that dream sequence. Interesting
comments about certain fanfic cliches (Ryoga+Ukyo, Ranma and Akane turning into
something out of a Harlequin novel, the ANC from hell). I'm glad that it was
ONLY a dream sequence.
Finally, don't worry about the lack of Japanese expressions. Remember, this is
technically translated from Japanese anyway... it's usually best (IMO) to keep
the Japanese terms to names and concepts that aren't easilly translated. No
need for a 'NANI!?!' when 'WHAT!?!' will do just as well.
Good Job.