I'd set this off in quotes since the first part isn't in first person.

And Sasami?  Oh, I am so sorry.  I did not mean to steal your childhood

>from you,

Again you shift jarringly into first person. Offset it somehow.

Actually, I offset it in italics when I wrote this on MS Works, but the web-based mail server I use can't differentiate between italics and regular type.

It appears in italics on the Fan Fic Archive, however.



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