Hi, Wanderer D!
Hi!
First, let me say I LIKE this story. I've been following in quiet awe for
a
while now, and I REALLY like this story. ^_^
Thanks!
Grammar lesson for today : "it's" ALWAYS means "it is" you want to be
using
"its" here.
very true,
Hi, Mako-chan! Great to see you so early!
Damn! Shouldn't have mentioned the brown hair.
pop in a comma.
,
AAAAAH! Where the hell is Tuxedo Kamen when SHE needs him?
My guess is with Usagi.
Holy crap, this better be a dream. It better be a dream. TELL ME IT'S A
DREAM!!!
It's a dream.
Urgh~~ Must~~ Read~~ FURTHER! ^_^
Might want to stick in one of those Legal Disclaimers we're all so fond of
here. You might not believe it, but people read these who will gladly sue
your butt into oblivion.
Must I really do that?! But, I guess you're right, there ARE people like
that in this world.
You have no idea how close I was to killing you before. ;P
I can imagine, I'd feel the same way WITH ANY AUTHOR OUT THERE THAT TRIES TO
KILL MAKOTO!!
It ought to be familiar. She gets struck by lightning almost every time
she
attacks someone!
[sniker]
hehe... lucky cushion...
WOAH! Where the heck did that come from? I need more Coca-Cola. Hand on a
second...
I'll wait.
I'm back! And it's "these".
Mayor grammar mistake # 2
AAAAAAAAAGH!!!!!! STOP KILLING MAKO-CHAN!!!!
Hey! The guy's in love with her! It's nightmare, it's supposed to make him
suffer!
You mean a "katana". "Katakana" means letters, like A, B, C...
Oh my GOD!!! I have no excuse whatsoever for MAYOR grammar mistake # 3
Huh? WHOSE stomach? Did he stick it back in Mako-chan? I was just starting
to like this Nathan guy, too...
Me too. ^-~
"speculation". And what is this, Furinkan? Can't a guy and a girl just be
friends? Oh, wait. It's junior high. Never mind. :D
You just wait until the TWO Amazons, and the female yeti Nathan is engaged
to appear.
This sounds kinda clumsy. I'm not sure how you can fix it, though...
I',m missing something there...
NATHAN : ACK! C-can't BREATHE!
MAKOTO : I DON'T CARE! I'M NEVER LETTING YOU LOOSE!
Oh, wait... I already DID this joke, back in Ronin Summer. ^_^
Ah, it never hurts to repeat it sometimes.
Awwwwww..... that's sweet.
I always liked gentle hugs, [sigh]
Wow, HE sure won't stick out in a crowd. ^_^
Is this a Matrix cross-over, and you didn't tell me? ^_^
nope, he's missing the glasses!
klaxons
#4
COOL! I assume he's going to be our villain of the week unless...
Wait a minute... BLACK hair... BLACK outfit... BLACK eyes...
IT'S SAPPHIRE, ISN'T IT?! ;P
well...
Dammit! How many different ways can Raye / Rei / Rae spell her name?
Beats me, I',m probably wrong there anyway, but since I've written it like
that and I don't know how to use the 'find and replace' I'll leave it be.
I think you mean "improve", not increase. But I could be wrong.
okay, that's 5
Uh-oh...
GOLD: WHERE'S THE BATHROOM!?!? GOTTA-REACH-TOILET!
YAY! YOU THE MAN, BLACK! SHOW US WHAT FOR!
(hmmph. I give the snot three seconds before the Senshi beat him like a
snare drum.)
Wanna bet? ^-^
PLEASE not the bedroom, PLEASE not the bedroom...
I'm not that sick.
Egads! It's the dreaded "Dishes of Dragon Destruction"! (you know, I think
Lina Inverse may have used those once...)
Nope, I don't think so... she's a little more... um...
No, huge sweatdrops always form on the BACK of the head.
Nah!
ROTFL! HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA! Mrs. High-and-mighty, and she didn't know SQUAT!
HAHAHAHAHAHAHA!
Always wanted to do that.
What, a toad? A jerk? A Pokemon?
a humming bird? Mulder? a Power Ranger?
Oh THAT'S what he turned into. A lunatic. Gotcha. ^_^
Man, Makoto's gonna get a MAJOR talking to when she gets home...
if she gets home.
Famous last words, Uranus. Famous. Last. Words.
Well, you know what they say... 'It's better to go fighting than...' yeah,
you know what I mean. I hope.
If he jumped BACK, wouldn't the blast of energy just hit him anyway?
<CLIP COOL FIGHT SCENE>
HEY! Haruka didn't tag out! REF! REF! ^_^
"This is Jonny Lopez from celebrity Death Match! (copyrighted) it seems the
scouts don't care for the rules, do they Nick? Nick? Nick! Quit staring at
Venus' legs!"
ZAP!
WHACK!
SMASH! WHEE! I LOVE IT!
ZOT!
PLOWIE!
Uhm... running out of sound effects... uhm, THUMP, I guess...
ACK! HE HIT MAKO-CHAN! KILL HIM! KILL HIM!!!!
All right, Mamoru! Smack this guy around a little! ^_^
Ah, GEEZ! When is that boy going to learn to DUCK?
Probably when he marries Usagi.
Wow, there's some brilliant strategy. The Senshi NEVER would have thought
that up be themselves...
It never hurts to give them a little promting.
YAY! Kick his butt, Nathan! Take him down!
Nuts. He beat me to it. I wanted to say that.
Sorry!
Bye, Nathan.
Bye, Morgan
Uh-oh... Mako's going NUTS! RUN FOR COVER!!!!!
YIKES! SHE'S RUNNING OUR WAY!!
Damn, but that was a good chapter! I can't believe it, but you killed
Nathan! And what the heck was up with Mako-chan? Ah, well, I'm sure you'll
tell us all when you feel like it.
You'll find out soon enough.
Great work, and keep it up!
I'll try.
-Morgan Hudson
(shamelessly plugging Ronin Summer, even in his tags!)
Thank you for the C&C!
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