Please C&C...I beg of you! o_o;;
As you wish.
hear its song often enough.) "Death's brewing in the world," a voice
said. "No choice but embracing it." It lilted with uneven rhythm,
like the dance of peasants.
That would either be Koryu or something else?
"The girl's there. You don't have to shout like that." I hated the
man already for the obvious logic. Style does matter; he obviously had
none.
Considering Hibiki's fighting style, yeah. Not so easy to use, but pretty
spiffy once you get the hang of it.
Well...that's the first chapter for you.
What do you think? Are you out there?
It's good, barring the occasional grammatical/spelling errors here and
there (I don't do that line-by-line thing). I'm wondering what direction
this is going, actually. Looking forward to more.
I was guessing on the identity of Hibiki from the start; ruled out Yuki
because she doesn't use a sword, and neither does Akari... geez, forgot
about Kojiro; she uses a sword too.
Anyone? *sigh* I guess not enough people
out there are familiar with The Last Blade
or its sequel...
Apparently I am. I play LB1 regularly (usually with Washizuka, or Kaede if
I feel scrubby) and LB2 only three times in one trip (Washizuka, Kojiro (big
surprise, a manual Washizuka), and Hibiki; I think I'd have zero
appreciation for Hibiki had I not actually used her myself).
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* "Nice try, Hitomi. But you're still full of shit."
* "I would never associate [Lurker] with the cancerous lump that you are,
and he's twenty times the writer that you are, and he doesn't spill
anti-Christian paranoia and Japanese-worship into everything he does like
you do, Hitomi."--All Chris Davies
--Razorclaw "Apparently my other name is Hitomi" X
Author: "The Wheel of Fire", "The World's Worst Ranma Fanfic!", "The
Geometry of Shattered Souls, Vanished Souls", "The Balance of Power", "The
Wraith of Blaze".
The only living crackpot that can make Kodachi sound appealing.
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