The most striking feature that Ranma noticed
about the man was his eyes.
They were maroon, with tiny red points of light
sparkling deep within them like baleful stars.
Penetrating eyes. Almost predatory.
<piku piku> In the words of Kasumi, "Oh my." Ranma's in for, er, quite a
challenge this time. Shampoo, Taro, Saffron... they got nothing that could
even come close to matching the ruthlessness of Akane's dinner guest.
"Uh, yeah. Great," Ranma replied. "So, um, what's
for dinner?"
Fell leveled a full strength smile at him, reminding
him of his need for wariness.
"That, my dear Ranma, is a surprise."
Well. That certainly qualifies as "ominous and foreboding". :)
"Not bad," he declared as he reached for a second
helping of the appetizer. "But what's a sweetbread?"
Fell's maroon eyes gleamed.
Hehehe. No one knows sweetbread better than "Fell".
Fell remained unmoved.
"But you did kill him," he said evenly.
Ranma nodded his head slowly.
"And it was in fact your intention to kill him."
Ranma sank back against his heels.
Heh. But the manga is so light-hearted and comic that the violence isn't
real and no one's ever in danger and no one's ever *really* trying to kill
anyone else! C'mon, buy into the mantra!
Nice way to show that Ranma and "Fell" do, indeed, have some things in
common. :)
THE END
Aww... no one got eaten? <pout>
Actually, the tension - will "Fell" serve up Ranma before the end of the
evening? Are we in fact eating the "sweetbread" of, say, a Tendo? - was
wonderful and kept the pace of this story flowing nicely.
I must say you've got "Fell"'s mannerisms and speech down flawlessly. I
felt that I was reading Harris all along. Splendid.
(As an aside: Too bad his latest novel was *sooooooo* bad. It read like a
badly-conceived self-insert. I had to shake my head at the end - he
basically destroyed the wonderful persona he'd created in his previous
novel. And it wasn't nearly as fun to read. I'd've rather read this story
instead. ^_^)
Again, nicely done without falling into the trap of being a "shocky-gory"
story.
-Richard