On Sat, Nov 06, 1999 at 11:33:40PM -0500, Miller, Bert wrote:
"I can, Ranma-sama, and your plan is sound, except that Ukyou-san
needs to stay down with you. You may need the extra distraction,
and she, unlike myself, is fast enough to stay out of the
monsters' clutches."
Ukyo is faster than Kodachi? Doesn't seem right to me, unless it's
because of something that happened in an earlier chapter. Kodachi's a
gymnast, while Ukyo's focused mainly on weapons training.
The one thing you missed from not reading the previous episodes.
(Akane, Ukyou, and to a lesser extent Shampoo have been physically
enhanced by Happosai's ki-recharge technique. Kodachi hasn't.)
It also doesn't necessarily follow that a gymnast will be faster than
a weapons user.
Grammatical nitpick: If the same speaker continues through two
successive paragraphs, don't use an end quote mark at the end of the
first, but do keep the opening quote mark in the second.
Hadn't heard that one.
I always thought that the end quote mark became optional in that case.
No matter, it's an obscure grammar rule, and it's not likely to make
much difference either way.
fidgit, I think.
That looked wrong to me, but I couldn't think of how else to
spell it, and I don't have a dictionary handy just now (on the
road, curse it, though I do seem more productive writing-wise
this way; fewer distractions, I suppose.) But your way looks
right.
'fidget'