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Same old. Same old.
Again Ranma had to ask exactly how he had allowed himself to get roped
into
the whole fiancee mess.
It's because you're dumb.
Ranma: I mean besides that.
After only one night in the Tendou household, his stress level had
tripled, and >it was not as though he had been laid back all that much
since acquiring his >curse.
In Ranma 1/2, Ranma's pretty laid back. He does seem to be able to relax
while the chaos goes on.
Here he has the problem of keeping his curse secret from the members of the
household as well, and with water still coming at him like it usually does,
he's a wee bit more stressed out. Still, 'stressed out' for Ranma isn't
what most people would consider stress. it's just relative to his usual
laid back demeanor.
NB: Remember, Ranma has all his original advantages and power. Now thats
been upped by the super solder juice. He's going to be rediculous.
By normal Ranma 1/2 standards. The problem is, everyone else has been
pretty much upped in the series as well.
You
cut him down several times, making him only a little better than Nabiki.
I would assume she's about as good as Akane in TOS.
Nah. She actually has a slightly higher skill level than TOS Akane. She
just took to it better, even if she doesn't particually like it. Also he's
a lot better than Nabby. Where she would have lost the fight in a matter of
minutes, he would have won if he hadn't got distracted and let Wolf Mask
bite him.
All of them wearing bizarre, if plain-looking, animal masks.
Isn't that an oxymoron?
Whoops.
"Give us all your precious metals and you won't get hurt,"
What? No money, credit cards, or watches?
Dub only talks of precious metals, as I recall. They aren't very bright,
after all.
The gang of four recovered consciousness about the same time, long after
Nabiki and the others had left the playground.
Gang of five.
Sigh. Such basic mistakes at times.
The whole Kodachi scene was kinda boring. I understand it was necessary
character development but it did seem to drag on.
Not much I can do about it, although I am trying to work on my scene
descriptions to help set the tone, so that was probably reflected there.
Will see if I can trim it some.
Ranma's dependence on his sheild is becoming a noted weakness. You know,
it can't be that long before someone capitalizes on it.
He's only been in two fights. Besides, Cap almost never went without his
shield. It was his trademark. That's not to say nothing's going to happen
to it, though.
In the second fight with the five masked stooges, you make several
references to Oni's nine inch nails. While it did manage to make me
decide to pop Pretty Hate Machine in,
^_^
it was also repetitive. Use talons
or claws a few times.
Okay.
Hawkeye suddenly felt very scared as Raiden, the Japanese God of Thunder,
prepared himself for battle.
1)Raiden isn't the only japanese god of thunder. Heung is also kicking
around.
Not since he got drunk off his butt and went to Mount Olympus to show 'that
fat, out of shape, red haired, warthog leader of a so-called pantheon who
the real master of lighting is.' Zues promised to return Heung in a couple
hundred years, once he was turned back from a goat and into a god.
(Now can I come up with improvisations on the spot or what? ^_^
2)Thor's screwed.
Nah! She'e never really been attracted to Raiden.
Aside from being a really powerful thunder god, Raiden
is a redicuously skilled martial artist. Remeber, he taught that dude
who wrote "A Book of Five Rings."
What, me have any actual knowledge of Japanese mythology outside of a name?
Perish the thought. ^_^ Seriously, these are Marvel characters, so expect
some variation from what 'should' be and what 'will' be when it comes to
the classic gods. ( I could have sworn in mythology Sif was supposed to be
blonde.)
This should be interesting.
I hope it will be.
Thanks a lot for the comments. They are greatly appreciated.
D.B. Sommer