Gary Kleppe wrote:
"- Yucca" <yyucca@hotmail.com> wrote:
Ah! Come come now, C&C, all of you!!!
Righto.
First of all, the stuff about Akane's cooking is extremely overused in
fanfics. I can't even begin to count the number of fics that have opened
with her trying to force Ranma to eat something. Though this sort of
thing was rather infrequent in the manga, for some reason I'll NEVER
figure out, people seem to think that this sort of scene is an
obligatory part of "original flavor." It isn't. If you must use it, at
least use it in a new and different way, and try to tie it to the plot
of your story.
Don't mind Gary, here. He just dismisses the anime entirely when he
does C&C, never mind that most people get their exposure to Ranma 1/2
from that medium. Akane doesn't cook well; there are episodes in both
the anime and manga which support this, though it tends to be more
prominent in the anime.
Try to get to the meat of your story -- which seems to be Ranma ending
up in the crystal -- as soon as possible.
This, however, is a good idea. The beginning should introduce the
reader to (first) the characters and (second) the plot. Since we
already know this Ranma and Akane, we can dispense with the character
introductions and get to the plot.
In general, I found your characterization of Akane lacking in the depth
that she has in the original. Again, study the manga for the right way
to do it. (You can download a good bit of it, free and translated into
English, at <http://ranmascan.dhs.org>.) Akane in particular is nearly
impossible to write well if you've only seen the anime.
I dunno about that... it depends on what anime you've seen. First
season provides a very good mix of 'The Two Faces of Akane', as well as
the OAVs. Of course, these tend to be more manga-based than the other
episodes; however, it is still anime, and high-quality storytelling to
boot.
Gary Kleppe
http://www.execpc.com/~kleppe/comics.html
-- Nick