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The sardines weren't worth the trouble. A few more shots, then
Ryoga-san would overheat and explode. Ducking around a corner,
I managed to lose him as I entered the ramshackle residence of
my Anime supplier.
One look at his face and I knew that I was betrayed. "Tell me."
I insisted. He refused, so I slammed him against the wall.
The first sentence of the second paragraph has a grammatical error --
it should be "had been betrayed". It's a past perfect/imperfect
tense thing...
The period after "Tell me" should be a comma.
"Last chance. Where can Ranma-Ranma find good fanfics?"
"Try Jason Liao." he whispered, before he slumped to the floor.
The period after "Try Jason Liao" should be a comma.
I heard the sounds of a door splintering as I left through the
window, one step ahead of Tendo Heavy Industries...
Why did I do this? Because I love the sig, and it pains me to see
these errors...
--Matt
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'Boy With Pail'... 'Kitten On Fire'..." --Steven Wright
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