HI,
1) No apology necessary.(Heck, if you have to
apologize for _THIS_ there are a LOT of writers who'd
have to commit seppuku.)
2)TOO detached. It was actually rather bland.
3)Could be a cute story with some work. Listen to
Kleppe-san.

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