On Sun, 24 Oct 1999, Red Death wrote:
Unlike some of the other Ranma/Matrix fics I've seen, this one seems quite
good. It does have its faults, however.
Oh, quite! For example...
Primarily that it seems a bit rushed. I just couldn't wrap my mind around
Ranma agreeing to go with Neo so quickly, despite Ranma being used to
strangeness on a daily basis.
...I wrote it as fast as I possible could, trying to dump everything in my
brain into a file, to get through the scene at the end of that first
draft.
I liked the bit about this portion of the Matrix being warped or out of
control, and the possible effects of that. Very nice touch. Leaves open a
nice avenue for plot advancement, finding out why, deling with it, etc.
Haven't decided precisely where to go with it yet.
Going on the assumption that it will go forward, I'd like to get this up on
the Superhighway. Are you planning on posting it anywhere on the web?
http://www.fanfic.com/~cherry/Matrix.0.5.1