David Johnston wrote:
Subject:
[FFML] [FFML [R1/2][fusion] Avenging Chapter 3: Blind Man's Bluff
Date:
Wed, 20 Oct 1999 16:12:41 -0400
From:
"DB Sommer" <sommer@3rdm.net>
Description: Mousse/Daredevil captures an incompetent supervillain, and
Ranma/Captain Japan/Bucky arrives at the Tendo household.
Comments: Needs a bit more filler. Some looks at the other's solo
careers
would balance out this chapter better.
Yes. I see what you mean. Of course, when nothing comes to you concerning
the remaining unfocused hero (Ukyou/Hawkeye) that makes things a wee bit
difficult.
As it stands, it's more like two
short chapters pasted together.
Unfortunately, I have to agree. I didn't think there was enough about
Mousse for a chapter to stand on its own, and to add on all i wanted to for
the Ranma and the Tendous part, would have given it a whole new chapter.
Hopefully the next one will be more linear.
Since when is "mature" a compliment for
an adult woman, particularly from a younger man?
Heh. Good point, although with Kasumi, who knows.
Ranma should maybe mix up which
daughter's value which qualities, complimenting Akane on her maturity,
Nabiki on her
womanliness and Kasumi on her strength...of will. Frankly, I think they'd
find that
more flattering, since every teen-age younger sister wants to be thought
mature,
Nabiki probably would like a man who doesn't see her as a jock/ice queen
and
Kasumi would appreciate having her authority as lady of the house
respected.
Hmm. True.
Besides, those were the people who actually gave him those compliments.
Well, even here, Ranma doesn't really know how to compliment a lady, so he
essentially just said the same things back. Your way works a little better,
though.
Thanks.
D.B. Sommer