First of all, you have neglected to convert your fic into plain text. That
means that a wide variety of punctuation marks have turned into irritating
nonsense for many readers.
Japanese policemen know to take off their shoes when entering a home.
Japanese police detectives do not carry guns on the job.
Not "onni". Oni.
�I was hoping to wait for your apprentice. Her input is actually
more important than yours at this point?�
No question mark was required.
He smiled wanely.
"wanly", or "inanely"
�Like what?� asked Priestess Kugi, suddenly interested in what the
detective was saying.
Doesn't fit the character. "Such as?" or "What do you mean?" would sound
more dignified.
�Now, Watori says he pulled a pad of paper, the kind you see in
offices, and asked what the boys names were. He wrote them down on the
sheet of paper then he folded it over and over onto itself and tore it
into many little pieces. He then blew the pieces out of his hand. He
says the pieces whirled around them and cut them to death.�
Why would they answer that question and not the other ones? Did you
ever see "Cast a Deadly Spell"?
Ira-Ira was a short, slender girl with wild russet colored hair and
very tan skin. Her ears were long and thin, like a mythical elf. The
two stared at her in the priestesses arms, trying to comprehend her
"priestess's"
form. She was lightly dressed, with gold bands around her ankles and
wrists. Miwaku recognized the small, jiggling bell that Kusnagi�s cat
Missing letter.
wore around her neck. The cloth band was tattered, but the bell still
remained securely fashioned to her neck.
"fastened"
�I think she�d just assume eat you. And besides, he�s already
beaten Ira-Ira and Kusanagi together. What do you think you can do that
they couldn�t?�
Do not trust the spell checker. The spell checker is not your friend.
"as soon"