This won't be my usual psychotic MST type C&C, since
1) I'm in Japan and the computer systems here suck and
2) my review team's on strike until I break down and
rent the rest of Trigun. So bear with me, since I
haven't done this in a while.
First off, I'd say that this style of writing is a
rather interesting choice, as it leaves a great deal
for the reader's mind to fill in. It's not the easiest
way in the world, but in this situation it was a very
good choice. It helps to add more interest and
interaction with the story.
As for the dialogue... it's a bit stilted at the very
beginning, but loosens up quite a bit as the fic goes
along. It's a damn near perfect personification of the
characters. The interaction between Koume and Yaegashi
is very typical of their normal reactions and gives
the story a feel that's quite close to the actual
series.
Overall a very nice job. I'm very very happy to see
some more BlueSeed fanfiction pop up out there! =^_^=
A fine piece of work. Great job!
Jess, the LilTigre (who's rather peeved that
Takada-sensei's got a new manga series out and the
magazine it's serialized in is hard to get in the
Kansai area) =^_^=
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